AnotherBrokenDoll Posted February 6, 2007 Share Posted February 6, 2007 More of a song i guess i hope you like it. Early in the morning, I think of you, Your face is all around, Theres no one else but you. Then later in the afternoon, I look i around to find, My sweetheart, oh my baby, She's so far behind. Theres still a smile on her face, Theres a crack in her heart, She just doesn't realise, No she ain't that smart. I love you hunny, More then any other girl, Yet still you sit and wait, Pretty as a pearl. When will that pretty face of yours, See theres more then you think to me, No i ain't your average girl, Not the sorta girl you'll always see. Theres still a smile on her face, Theres a crack in her heart, She just doesn't realise, No she ain't that smart. I see your hidden tears, Yeah i see your broken shell, I want to fix your heart, I just wish i'd caught you before you fell. Oh baby i want to help you, Open up your eyes, Let you see whats around you, Want to answer to your cries. Theres still a smile on her face, Theres a crack in her heart, She just doesn't realise, No she ain't that smart. I won't let you go, No sweetie you'll never be alone, Just follow me, Soon there'll be no reason to moan. Happiness will flow around us, Darling i'm make you smile, Yeah your joy can last, For more then just a little while. Theres still a smile on her face, Theres a crack in her heart, She just doesn't realise, No she ain't that smart. Yet still she walks away, Tears run down those cheeks, They are the sorta tears, That will last more then a few weeks. Yeah and those scars on her wrists, They may never fade, Yet no one truly knows, Why they were ever made. Theres still a smile on her face, Theres a crack in her heart, She just doesn't realise, No she ain't that smart. Theres still a smile on her face, Theres a crack in her heart, She just doesn't realise, No she ain't that smart. Link to comment
Ellie2006 Posted February 6, 2007 Share Posted February 6, 2007 Rozi, Simply beautiful. It brought tears to my eyes ... I hope the smile on her face will soon reflect her mended heart ... Hugs, Ellie Link to comment
AnotherBrokenDoll Posted February 7, 2007 Author Share Posted February 7, 2007 Thanks both of you. I've never written a song before and although it started as another poem soon i had a little tune in my head and everything lol. But thankyou both so much Link to comment
SkylinesTurnstiles Posted February 7, 2007 Share Posted February 7, 2007 Hey baby, Thast reallly really good.It nearly made me cry probley cuz im listening to a sad song think of stuff but gosh your poem is good . Link to comment
AnotherBrokenDoll Posted February 10, 2007 Author Share Posted February 10, 2007 Thanks hunny, just know that Matts in a better place now.... though it still hurts i know Link to comment
SoDone Posted February 10, 2007 Share Posted February 10, 2007 outstanding. i wish i could hear the tune you wrote it to. Link to comment
AnotherBrokenDoll Posted February 10, 2007 Author Share Posted February 10, 2007 lol its just a silly little tune. I can't sing at all. I wish i could and i wish i could put some music to it, but i'm kinda untalented in that area. Link to comment
Ellie2006 Posted February 10, 2007 Share Posted February 10, 2007 Hiya Rozi, Again, I think this is a great poem! One thing, if I may: how about focusing on where your talents lie? Rozi's strengths: writer of lovely poems composer of sweet tunes good friend (and has good friends) expressive thinker . . . . the list goes on and on Link to comment
AnotherBrokenDoll Posted February 11, 2007 Author Share Posted February 11, 2007 Thanks ellie oh you make me blush hehe. Link to comment
charley Posted February 12, 2007 Share Posted February 12, 2007 Great poem. I like it. It's emotionally intense enough that it's hard to read at points. Moving. Link to comment
AnotherBrokenDoll Posted February 12, 2007 Author Share Posted February 12, 2007 Thanks Charely, I'm glad you likes it . Link to comment
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