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  2. Well I'm not sure if it could be published because I don't play any musical instruments myself and have zero experience in the music industry. But I like the lyrics so I can say that much! Do you write a lot of poetry and lyrics? I've always loved writing poetry too, since I was a kid.
  3. Is the a publishable song? All advice, critique, and comments are welcome!! Dear Future Lover - (O.F. Hanson) (Copyright. Majestic Records Inc.) I have cherished a dream A dream that someday you’d be mine. If love’s what it seems Then I hope to capture it in time. Somewhere out there Is the perfect one And to show that I care I wrote you this song. (Mm-mm, mm-mm) Under a blanket of stars I pray for your heart Wanting to be where you are Hoping you’re not too far It’s not easy living curiously Wishing it can be reality I’ve been looking for love, Something that’s meant to be Wanting your hugs, A “Heaven” I wish to see Imagining us, True love is all I need So if you’re out there Baby listen to me Where ever you are I hope to earn your heart ‘Cause I’m only just another Looking for a Future Lover And that’s all I’ll ever need Baby then I’d be complete With somebody to love me (Oh-h oh-h) Under the brightest of skies I think with my eyes Picturing both you and I Beneath the stars of the night It’s not easy being all alone Wanting someone’s love to call my own I’d run into your arms Like it’s all I’ve ever known Protect you from harm And make my love your home ‘Cause true love is all I need So if your out there Baby listen to me Where ever you are I hope to earn your heart ‘Cause I’m only just another Looking for a Future Lover And that’s all I’ll ever need Baby then I’d be complete With somebody to love me (Oh-h oh-h) I have cherished a dream A dream that someday you’d be mine. If love’s what it seems Then I hope to capture it in time. Somewhere out there Is the perfect one And to show that I care I wrote you this song. Where ever you are I hope to earn your heart ‘Cause I’m only just another Looking for a Future Lover And that’s all I’ll ever need Baby then I’d be complete With somebody to love me (Baby I’m the other But for now we’re future lovers And I hope we find each other) ‘Cause you’d be all I’ll ever need
  4. Just an updaye, if anyone was wondering. I tried to make this look really good in a doc and actually print it out. I was hoping just by luck I could get one of my printers to actually work. But that didn't happen. I wrote it out by hand on a piece of notebook paper and put it on her bed the other night. She loved it.
  5. Thank you. I've been told my writing style is kind of like song lyrics. I've worked behind the scenes in the independent film industry a lot mostly as an editor, and my style of editing is really music video-esque too. I haven't written any poetry in ages though, so I'm surprised this came out as this good.
  6. This is fantastic, I loved it. As I was reading I couldn't help easily hearing it as a rap song, and by that I just mean it seemed to flow so freely. Really impressive stuff, you have a talent.
  7. I could give a really long explanation for that or a short one. The short answer is it was a random year that I chose in the late 2300s. It really was just random. That whole story started out as something completely different. I used to dress up as this post apocalyptic character that I created for working at certain festivals. I put a lot of work into the outfit I wore and figured just as much work should go into developing the character. The more detailed her backstory got the more I started wanting to write it all down. But yea... when deciding what year she was from I just picked a random year and went with it.
  8. Love the expressiveness and also the format and what everyone else who complimented said. Why did you choose 300 years in the future for your novel (meaning other than some other time frame in the future?) Just curious!
  9. Thanks Cyndar, it's also nice to see a poem posted here. I used to enjoy reading what people posted. There were a lot of creative people back in the old days. Doesn't seem to be many poets posting anymore. Maybe I need to dabble with some writing again. It's been awhile.....
  10. That part really got me. Feeling like the outsider trying to get by in a world he doesn't fully fit into. Wanting to find happiness and love ("victory") but only knowing sorrow and heartache. Knowing something is missing, but not having the words to express it or make it better. It makes you feel so helpless. But then the right one comes along and you're not afraid anymore, willing to risk it all for love. Beautiful job. If you're writing gets published, let me know because I'll be buying a copy. I like sci-fi and mysteries, so the crime story is up my alley. And the mental illness one sounds interesting as well.
  11. Yea... I try to avoid them but this was one time where I felt like it fit really well. The world around you almost stops for a short time when you fall really hard for someone.
  12. I've actually written a lot of stuff. I have two long series I've been developing for years. One is about mental illness and the other is a crime drama that takes place 300 years in the future. I had a short story published when I was a teenager. It was something I really wanted to pursue when I was younger but my family was just so negative about it. It's one thing to have insanely high expectations for your kids and push them to be perfect. But IMO it's just as bad to do the opposite like my family did. My parents had really low expectations for my brother and I. They just drilled it into both of us that we would grow up to be trash, low lives, screw-ups, etc. And we've actually both grown up to do pretty well for ourselves, oddly enough.
  13. What's wrong with cliche? Sometimes it just fits. I think the line works perfectly. I wouldn't change it. I think most of us are writers on this forum. I've spoken to a few who are either attempting novels are have been published, but obviously all are writers to some degree.
  14. Well done. The hypnotized line is my favorite. Since I write novels as a hobby, the only point I'll be nit-picky about is "time stood still." It's cliche, so my advice would be to change it so it's not.
  15. Not yet, but I will. I am just waiting for the right time. I thought about sending it to her on messenger while she's at work tonight. But I think it would be better to actually give her a printed copy of it. I currently don't have a working printer though. Next time I have prints made at the shop that does all my art prints I will have them print it out for me.
  16. Really interesting and yes, now it makes more sense. Did you share the poem with her? It's beautiful.
  17. Thank you. We are close to the same age. There was a massive blizzard in February the year I was born. She was born just before the blizzard hit. And my parents have always told me I was conceived during that blizzard. They said everything was shut down and there was nothing to do but lay around the house. So last night her and I were talking about that. And she was joking around about how she was born and brought the blizzard with her so that my parents would be snowed in and conceive me so we could be together. That's what inspired this. That's where the references to cold and snow come into play. I know you didn't ask for any explanation. I just felt like providing one.
  18. I literally just wrote this in about ten minutes. It was inspired by a conversation I had with my girlfriend last night at around 4AM. Any feedback is good feedback. Thanks. Also I think my spell check was either off or just not working when I was typing it. I think I got any mistakes but if there still are some that's why. Into this world you came and brought the cold. All these lives together, we were young and we were old. I was waiting up above when down came the snow, I was waiting without you when the Universe let me go. Old souls thrown back into youth, Heaven lies, Hell is truth. Shocked and broken from the tauma of my birth, A lost grieivng spirit wandering alone on this Earth. Blind eyes must learn to see. The solitary one must learn to be. Longing for victory, but knowng defeat, Unable to explain feeling incomplete. Your eyes, like beacons drew me to your side. Your words, like music, left me hypnotized. All those times our paths nearly crossed, All those times we both were lost. For years, so close but so far, And then time stood still, and now here we are. Thrown into this existance from the skies above, Take my hand, no more fear, we know only love.
  19. Lol, Lo...that gave me a giggle. I hope you're doing well and that your little one is doing well. x My interpretation of this song is that he is desperate for love and for intimacy with someone that loves him, but he doesn't have that. All he has is a stranger who is willing to have a one night stand with him and a meaningless encounter. But he is pretending that it means something, anything...because of how desperately lonely he is. It's a pretty sad song to be honest.
  20. I agree and don't really care if it's attractive or not -I just love it. Always have since age 3. By the way a friend of mine said she recently got ejected from her book club which lately has met only virtually of course. She said she didn't want to meet up for unrelated reasons like a movie night about the book or for other gatherings. She simply wanted an intellectual discussion about the specific book. So she's out but someone in the book club still wants to be her friend and get to know her so there's that. Our local library is doing a book club type meeting next month where you simply discuss via zoom what you've been reading -I might try that!
  21. So nice to find out that there are many bookworms at enotalone! Reading is attractive, I think.
  22. Another tough but excellent book: Atlas Shrugged, by Ayn Rand. Really brilliant. I've read that a couple times and after my last job experience I think I'm due to read it again soon. I could go on forever, so I'll just stop here. __________________________________________ I loved Atlas Shrugged. It is a brilliant insight into the greed and entitlement attitude of humans.
  23. "Another absolute masterpiece: Gone With the Wind. Forget the movie. The book is where it's at." Yes totally. Read it so many times.
  24. Oh god, what a question. I like so many. As a kid, I was always drawn to sci-fi/fantasy stuff. I recently re-read a lot of those old books and I still really like them. One of my favorite books is called The Last Unicorn, by Peter S. Beagle. It's such a wise, metaphorical book. I've tried to expand my horizons and have read some of the "classics," like the Bronte sisters, Jane Austin, Sir Walter Scott, Alexandre Dumas, etc. It takes time to get used to the older English language. I've had to read most of these books several times in order to get a good understanding of the language and the story. But they don't disappoint!! I recently finished a trilogy by Alice Borchardt, about shape-shifters. This was a re-read of a series that I picked up in my late teens/early 20s. After I bought the first book (The Silver Wolf), I learned that Alice Borchardt was the sister of Anne Rice. I liked a lot of Anne Rice's books, and I started to become paranoid that I was only liking Alice Borchardt's books because I liked Anne Rice's books. But now that I've re-read them, I know that I truly like Alice's writing as well. There's something informal and fun about them (even though they can be explicit and gory). I will probably pick up some of her other series. I think they are all interconnected. Now I'm reading The Pioneers by James Fenimore Cooper. This is another exercise in language comprehension, but I like it so far. He has a gentle humor that I did not expect. That's because my only experience with any story by Cooper was the movie Last of the Mohicans with Daniel Day Lewis and that was definitely not funny. I think To Kill a Mockingbird is a masterpiece of writing. Another absolute masterpiece: Gone With the Wind. Forget the movie. The book is where it's at. I think Stephen King is a great author. I very much enjoyed all Thomas Harris's books revolving around the world of Hannibal Lecter. I love Frank Herbert's Dune and have reread that book about a million times. I've read most of the sequels as well. They are not the easiest books, but they are so interesting. Another tough but excellent book: Atlas Shrugged, by Ayn Rand. Really brilliant. I've read that a couple times and after my last job experience I think I'm due to read it again soon. I could go on forever, so I'll just stop here.
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