Hannahleh Posted February 25, 2007 Share Posted February 25, 2007 Another day Another guy Looking for another high More close calls A different cop One more box Of pills to pop Thizz today Die tomorrow From waves of joy To pits of sorrow Flying's all good Till you fall and hit Bottom rock bottom And what you'd give To have your wings back. But suddenly your life is all flying And stealing and lying You're flat broke (and you're broken) And you're trying and trying To feel whole again When you’re not. You were brighter than boomers More vibrant than rolls And just like the E You’re melting holes In my head. More addicting than coke Babe, can’t you see? You’ve got me hooked And won’t be free Till I quit you. My love. Link to comment
honeyspur Posted February 25, 2007 Share Posted February 25, 2007 Wow! - this is amazing!!!!!!! Link to comment
melrich Posted February 25, 2007 Share Posted February 25, 2007 Very good. I hope it is not about your experience though. Link to comment
AnotherBrokenDoll Posted February 26, 2007 Share Posted February 26, 2007 I really like it, shows emotion and thats what i like to see in a poem... Great work and keep it up Link to comment
Steven1607307306 Posted March 1, 2007 Share Posted March 1, 2007 Rocks. Rolls. Ha, pun intended. I like this it's very fun and takes a surprising shift. Link to comment
Newo Ikkin Posted March 1, 2007 Share Posted March 1, 2007 I like this a hell of a lot. You've worked against the flow of poetry and made it almost a poetic song, with lyrical beat. Link to comment
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