Siraf Posted August 8, 2006 Share Posted August 8, 2006 The smoky darkness blocks my view I can't see clear at all Looking around, trying to see you I can't see clear at all I fall down again and again No-one to help me out this time The curtains of sorrow strangling my mind Impossible, the darkness won't shine So don't you come near, don't forget now Don't show me feelings, don't try And don't mention something to make my tears fall 'Cos I promised myself not to cry Give me a reason to stay in this world Give me a sign or two, baby Show me those beauties that I never saw 'Cos maybe that beauty is you - Siraf Link to comment
PRSOV Posted August 8, 2006 Share Posted August 8, 2006 Great work! Good use of words and very well written. I actually feel like I am that person, it is written that graphically. PR Link to comment
yeawutever Posted August 8, 2006 Share Posted August 8, 2006 Well written poem!!!!!!!! Link to comment
Daddy Bear Posted August 9, 2006 Share Posted August 9, 2006 Siraf, this is not the first time i was blown away by one of your poems. call me a fan, and keep it coming! ^_^ Link to comment
Siraf Posted August 9, 2006 Author Share Posted August 9, 2006 Thanks alot ppl, I wrote that when I felt kinda lonely..I'll be posting another one up soon =) Link to comment
AnotherBrokenDoll Posted August 10, 2006 Share Posted August 10, 2006 Sweet poem i really liked it Link to comment
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