can ya help me tweak a personals profile?

[Grokker]

Honestly, I wouldn't change a thing. Covers all the bases, and doesn't sound forced at all... overthinking it might make it sound that way, though.

 

Good luck, Slightlybent, and May You Find Sanctuary

[jengh]

Personally, I thought, overall, it was fantastic. Very well written, humorous.. I do, however, agree with the other posters about possibly removing the deep poetry, talking people out of suicide things. While there's certainly nothing wrong with either, it's best saved for a later conversation.

 

And I must say, if I was a single, 35 year old Southern California woman, I would definitely be interested!