Sam _ Posted October 21, 2005 Share Posted October 21, 2005 All my life I've been waiting, waiting, and waiting... Sometimes I did not know what I was waiting for. Other times, everything was so clear. Some people, they wait for mundane materials. Others, lofty dreams, or noble schemes. I used to believe in miracles, But a few months ago, I didn't believe in them anymore. I usued to believe in hope, But a few months ago, I had no choice but to abandon it. I used to believe in love, But it's tender promises are but distant, foreign echoes. I used to live, but now I am dead. Some moments, I don't even exist, Such is the void inside me. My mind's reaper beckons me with thoughts And words of oblivion and destruction. My heart beats, yet it lies arrested, So I beat it. I used to dream of a future, But all I can think of now is the past. My chances are gone, No words or feelings can bring back those seconds. Throughout my life I have been waiting, Waiting to live-to know life before death. I've existed, and suffered, saving my luck For a brighter tomorrow. But it never came, and for that, I've waited my life away. Perhaps, I asked for too much, for now, All I am waiting for, is death... What do you guys think of it? I wrote it last year and I still can't think of a title for it. Can anyone give me one they think would be a good title for this poem? Link to comment
cinderella jones Posted October 21, 2005 Share Posted October 21, 2005 I like it....if your goal was to create a poem where it reflects a morbid feel to it then it worked... I am not sure what you can titile it..but the title should definitely jump out to the readers enough to get them curious enough to want to read your poem. Link to comment
lost_status Posted October 22, 2005 Share Posted October 22, 2005 I liked it also!! I could feel so much emotion in it! If you have anymore, post them, your a great writer! Link to comment
Sam _ Posted October 23, 2005 Author Share Posted October 23, 2005 I liked it also!! I could feel so much emotion in it! If you have anymore, post them, your a great writer! Thanks. I will. Link to comment
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