My last poem.....

[Justaguy21]

I'm going to try and work things out with my ex this summer and if all else fails I'm going to just give her this long poem and say goodbye. Give me your thoughts.....

 

 

That day I called you on a Sunday afternoon

I thought we would talk and I'll see you soon

But that thought vanished as I heard your voice

That you made your so called "choice"

So I freak out and started to cry at your invisible feet

Begging you to just see that we weren't beat

But you just closed your gates and walked away

While the pain that was confusing, was here to stay

Your reason for leaving didn't make any sense

But it was too late because of your reinforced fence

I wasn't the controlling, jealous, and personal interrogate

You just decided not to communicate

There were no signs of you being sad

All I saw was future, affection, and us being glad

I should have seen this coming? C'mon that's not bad luck

Cause if it walks, talks, and looks, it must be a duck

You've been miserable, sad, and unhappy these past couple of weeks?

And that you've wanted to break up since our future looked so bleak?

So everytime I held you, kissed, made love, or talked about our kids was a lie?

And the only reason you told me was to keep me happy and make me fine?

You couldn't have lied about those things even if you wanted to

Because you have a heart and are just confused

You say you don't love me like that anymore and I'm just a friend

And how it's impossible for your heart to mend?

So I asked about this guy and you said who?

Don't you see you have a perfect guy in front of you?

I'm sorry about the past pains and lies I told

But I was young and just wasn't totally mold

Put our past behind us, that's what I say

Because of the past I'm the man I am today

I've put the past behind us and looked ahead

But you just said No and told me we were dead

Don't you know relationships our take and give?

But it won't work with you being implosive

So you want to test the waters and see what else is out there?

Well forget that, I'm not waiting because that is something I can't bear

It's sad that your heart doesn't even see

The perfect guy that is in me

I just wanted the truth about the guy so I could move on

And realize that you wanted to meet new people and I was gone

But you couldn't because you still love me deep inside I know

Yet, you won't show it because of your pride and stubbornness won't go

I could write this poem six more pages long

Or sit down and even write you a corny song

I'm not saying it's all you or all me

It's just sad that you have given up on something so promising

Every time we made love, kissed or told each other I love you, it was true

And when you were in my arms you would never want to move

This poem may change something or nothing, but it doesn't matter now

I know my words mean nothing to you this is something I can vow

Have a wonderful life Sara and I hope everything works for you

Just remember this guy named Stephen who was molded just for you and I come in small numbers if none or just a few……

[Jitrenda]

It's a good idea...just beware of the repercussions. If she does not want to get back together with you and you give her the poem and say goodbye. She may read it and say she wants you back, if she realizes she lost a good thing (and by the sounds of it...she did). Just make sure you know what you want.

 

take care of you and take it easy!

[Justaguy21]

Thanks for your respone and I just got your PM and replied to you. Also I changed the part:

 

I could write this poem 6 pages long

or sit down and write a corny song

TO:

I changed for you to save this relationships health

But it didn't work so now I'm changing for myself

 

I think that's way better.

[Mizerys_Company]

You know what, man? That is one of the greatest poems I have ever read. If this girl has any kind of moral decency or wits upon her, she should cry to this poem. I would crumble into pieces if a girl ever wrote something like that to me in an attempt to have me back. Sure, it's just words...but powerful ones. I personally would know that I had lost something very special in my life if I had ever received something like that. I wish you the best, and I hope that poem is the killer you are looking for...and I hope it makes the impact you want to make.

Good luck, man.

[smiles314]

He is right!!!!

She should realize how she lost someone so good...

 

:silly:

[cs20thcenturyfox]

I liked that poem, it was very good, keep it up guy

[Justaguy21]

Mizerys, thank you for the very nice comment. Man I put my heart into that poem and I want it to make a tremendous impact. You know what though? I have written her poems before and they never made that much of an impact but this one is the creme' de la creme of the end poems. I'll keep you updated and thanks again for your very nice comment, I appreciate it. Thank you too Smiles, your a sweety.

-justaguy

 

Added: Thanks cs20thcenturyfox, I appreciate that nice comment.

[pimpcess]

That really was a great poem, so heartfelt and emotional. Please keep writing, u have a talent.

 

Pimpcess

[neva_black_n_white]

great poem i really liked it, if she didnt know how you felt then she sure does now. that had a whole lot of meaning and simple to understand. whilst being simple it put accross some of the hardest emotions to withstand....love.

anyway good luck.

~kel