tiredofvampires Posted October 26, 2008 Share Posted October 26, 2008 (This one is from a few years ago. I am dedicating it to everyone who is suffering the loss of a love, and most especially to a few dear ones here who have lost their perfect soulmates. You guys know who you are.) WITHOUT Thorns without the rose Swan Lake without toes, ladders without the rungs breathing without lungs, alphabet soup without abc’s kneeling prayer without knees, popsicles without the sticks mortar without the bricks, candles without wicks bras without chicks, music played without notes dreams dreamed by rote, pillow without a bed stairs without treads, trees with no trunk basketball without the dunk, chessboard without squares waltzes without pairs, celery without the stalk blackboards without chalk, sky without the blue living life without you. Link to comment
arwen Posted October 26, 2008 Share Posted October 26, 2008 This should be put to music. It's beautiful. Link to comment
Ac143 Posted October 26, 2008 Share Posted October 26, 2008 I agree - aww made me sad Link to comment
floating_away Posted October 26, 2008 Share Posted October 26, 2008 I can feel the loss through the words. A window into how those who've truly lost feel. Link to comment
mellybelly Posted October 26, 2008 Share Posted October 26, 2008 oh TOV, it's perfect. i love the flow, i love the rhyming, i love the images...i love how you used such simple things to depict the gut wrenching feeling of loss that can be so hard to describe sometimes. as sad as it is, it's so sweet and true. i love it. Link to comment
raining.stars Posted October 26, 2008 Share Posted October 26, 2008 I Love it TOV! I agree with Melly its perfect and it is like how I am feeling right now. I'm going to print it out and keep it. Link to comment
KG Posted October 26, 2008 Share Posted October 26, 2008 Very, very nice....this was me last night. Link to comment
Beoslasher Posted October 26, 2008 Share Posted October 26, 2008 Simply Wonderful Fighting off tears as I type. Link to comment
tiredofvampires Posted October 27, 2008 Author Share Posted October 27, 2008 Thank you, all...your words have really touched me, and made this all worth posting. I was a little worried it might seem....cheesy....as it's not my usual style and rhyming is not easy for me. But this one didn't make it feel hard, and that's I guess when you know it's coming straight from the source... And CC, what a matchless compliment that you would print it out!! What a stone HONOR! Thank you, sweet lady, for making me feel pretty great. All of you. Link to comment
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