Dagless Posted March 9, 2008 Share Posted March 9, 2008 A couple of Sundays back I was feeling really lost, did some crying and wrote this. It doesn't rhyme, it was just thoughts and feelings written down really. I wasn't going to post it but reading it today I though I really does get accross how I was feeling that day, so here it is. My mind is with you But my body longs to hold you Another night of crying holding your things Your smell is still there That’s the closest I can get It feels like losing you again It’s the loneliness that’s killing me This world is so empty without you It’s just not the same This was not how it was suppose to end We were going to be happy That’s all we ever wanted It’s like I’ve been hollowed out Nothing left but a mind that does nothing but think about you And a body that doesn’t understand That you’re gone. Link to comment
itsallgrand Posted March 9, 2008 Share Posted March 9, 2008 I'm glad you posted it. The last paragraph especially "got to me". Link to comment
tiredofvampires Posted March 13, 2008 Share Posted March 13, 2008 Yeah, that part about "A body that doesn't understand that you're gone" really tugs at me. And great you posted it. I love free verse poems, and so not having to rhyme is often freeing! Good job. Link to comment
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