neva_black_n_white Posted December 4, 2006 Share Posted December 4, 2006 i lay back and painfully watch it all letting my body drop slowly, no hands to catch this fall i plummet into endlessness leaving nothing to chance no love to pull me back this time theres no last dance my heart craves for a reaction, but my body feels numb i cry over something i made myself loose, how could i be so pathetically dumb i hear your voice and in excitement i try to pull myself up to you, try to gain your attention - oh, what a fool i look through blank eyes as though i expect empathy why sould your body give anything back, no part of you belongs to me Link to comment
AnotherBrokenDoll Posted December 9, 2006 Share Posted December 9, 2006 Thats really powerful, i love the way you put your words together. It makes your poetry almost addictive. Link to comment
silentalways Posted December 9, 2006 Share Posted December 9, 2006 i recognize that stage - lol it sucks big time the good part is u are near the end - hang tight budddddddddddie question about r's poetry tho - do men or women compose more morse stuff on sights like this do u think? and yes, nice job r - some people find it hard to reveal emotions let alone post them - stay kewl Link to comment
neva_black_n_white Posted December 9, 2006 Author Share Posted December 9, 2006 thanks guys x i really appreciate it. its a weird feeliung that i seem to keep coming back to .. mildly irritating, i guess its a phase. as for your question silentalways i think your right, people seem to over emphasise problems through poetry on here. well, i dont want to speak for others. BUT, i know at times, when i look at old poems, they seem much worse that the actual problem at hand. this ones more about a broken heart and indecisiveness over decisions which i was so strong over before. i dont think ill ever dampen my views on a broken heart. so in some poems.. i wouldnt say theyre too morbid Link to comment
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