Daddy Bear Posted August 24, 2007 Share Posted August 24, 2007 I had to have some candy when I didn't have no money There are those, I suppose, who would find that funny Sickly from before, but the craving hit for more So I made her die, the girl inside the little candy store Should I let myself outside again, or should I stay at home It would really be a ball if we could all have clones Maybe that way, science someday finally would discover If it's better to be dead or be alive and be a lover I've got the copromorphic Midas touch, and you don't want to feel it Thought I found the cure, but now I'm sure I'll never heal it Terminal, quite possible, and definitely chronic Can you take me to a place where every face is not Adonic No, don't answer; life is cancer Everyone's a lousy dancer... Link to comment
miracle29 Posted August 24, 2007 Share Posted August 24, 2007 I had to have some candy when I didn't have no money There are those, I suppose, who would find that funny Sickly from before, but the craving hit for more So I made her die, the girl inside the little candy store Should I let myself outside again, or should I stay at home It would really be a ball if we could all have clones Maybe that way, science someday finally would discover If it's better to be dead or be alive and be a lover I've got the copromorphic Midas touch, and you don't want to feel it Thought I found the cure, but now I'm sure I'll never heal it Terminal, quite possible, and definitely chronic Can you take me to a place where every face is not Adonic No, don't answer; life is cancer Everyone's a lousy dancer... Ok, this is just cute. And well put together. Thanks for the good read. And I "Midas Touch" NICE! Link to comment
Daddy Bear Posted August 24, 2007 Author Share Posted August 24, 2007 I wasn't really shooting for 'cute', but I'm glad you enjoyed it anyway. God, I'm a hack. If that ain't the perfect icing on the epiphany cake... Link to comment
miracle29 Posted August 24, 2007 Share Posted August 24, 2007 I wasn't really shooting for 'cute', but I'm glad you enjoyed it anyway. God, I'm a hack. If that ain't the perfect icing on the epiphany cake... Ok perhaps cute was a bad word. CREATIVE is much more suitable. YOU ARE NO HACK! Link to comment
Daddy Bear Posted August 24, 2007 Author Share Posted August 24, 2007 Please don't take offense at my temperamental reaction. Beauty is in the eye of the beholder, and a poem, like all art, can mean whatever is seen in it. To know that his creation says anything at all to his audience should be enough for any artist. Link to comment
YabbaDabba Posted August 24, 2007 Share Posted August 24, 2007 I wasn't really shooting for 'cute', but I'm glad you enjoyed it anyway. God, I'm a hack. If that ain't the perfect icing on the epiphany cake... Haha, that last bit made me laugh out loud. Link to comment
miracle29 Posted August 24, 2007 Share Posted August 24, 2007 Please don't take offense at my temperamental reaction. Beauty is in the eye of the beholder, and a poem, like all art, can mean whatever is seen in it. To know that his creation says anything at all to his audience should be enough for any artist. No I didn't take offense..i was hoping you didn't . P.S. It can't be worse than my suicide poem, where someone said "aww how sweet I was like " * * *?????" Link to comment
sandyv Posted August 24, 2007 Share Posted August 24, 2007 I sat and thought about this poem SB, runs deep, I like it... Link to comment
Daddy Bear Posted August 24, 2007 Author Share Posted August 24, 2007 No I didn't take offense..i was hoping you didn't . P.S. It can't be worse than my suicide poem, where someone said "aww how sweet I was like " * * *?????" you know how I feel. That made me smile. (I hope I wasn't the one who said that about your poem.) Link to comment
Daddy Bear Posted August 24, 2007 Author Share Posted August 24, 2007 I sat and thought about this poem SB, runs deep, I like it...Ah, Sandy, always the sweetheart... xo Link to comment
Miss Firecracker Posted August 25, 2007 Share Posted August 25, 2007 Sounds like a Snoop Dog song, somebloke. I like it, but I felt a wave of depression while reading it. How depressed were you when you wrote this? I'm trying to understand where that came from. Doesn't sound the way you usually do. Are you having a bad day? If you are, I'm sorry. Or it could be because I'm depressed a little today? I don't know. Link to comment
Cimmie Posted August 25, 2007 Share Posted August 25, 2007 Has a bitter finish, like a good whisky. 'Copromorphic' is not a word that you would find in a Snoop Dogg song, though! Hope you are ok, SB Link to comment
Miss Firecracker Posted August 25, 2007 Share Posted August 25, 2007 You are right about that, Cimmie. Just the rhythm is what I'm talking about. Like a rap song. Link to comment
Miss Firecracker Posted August 25, 2007 Share Posted August 25, 2007 Copromorphic isn't even found in a dictionary. Link to comment
Daddy Bear Posted August 26, 2007 Author Share Posted August 26, 2007 Sounds like a Snoop Dog song, somebloke. I like it, but I felt a wave of depression while reading it. How depressed were you when you wrote this? I'm trying to understand where that came from. Doesn't sound the way you usually do. Are you having a bad day? If you are, I'm sorry. Or it could be because I'm depressed a little today? I don't know. Your observation on my condition was an astute one, Miss F. I was indeed on the proverbial floor for a short while, so low that irrational and despondent thoughts occurred to a person who normally rejects such dark things out of hand. In truth, it is often in these rare moments that poetry asserts itself in my mind. I'm feeling much more myself today, and I hope you're in good spirits as well. Thank you masses of bunches for the inquiry. *hug* Has a bitter finish, like a good whisky. 'Copromorphic' is not a word that you would find in a Snoop Dogg song, though! Hope you are ok, SB I am... *hug* ...and now, even better. Copromorphic isn't even found in a dictionary. Rolling down the street smoking Indo Sippin' on gin and juice Laid back... with my copromorphic mind on my money and my money on my copromorphic mind Yeah, I kind of pulled that word out of my... hat. Sometimes I prefer the obfuscating opacity of chowder to the revealing clarity of a thinner soup. Thanks to all of you for the attention... er, I mean, feedback. Link to comment
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