Twisted, Crooked

[Steven1607307306]

When he sees himself, he sees trouble.

Trapped in dust and rubble,

He smoked his life away.

Waiting for the dawning day.

The anger is quite subtle,

Falls in a hole, made by his own shovel.

 

He tumbles through in an angry abyss,

He can't see through the condensed mist.

He cuts himself, so he can cease to exist.

Twirling in a downward spiral.

Until he discovers a stone to mark his mile.

Breaks through addiction with an iron fist

Cuts on his arm disappear from his wrist.

 

He sees the blinding light,

But addiction won't depart without a fight.

So darkness, yet again, returns.

He starts to get sick, his stomache churns

The pain embedded within him burns.

Turns to shadows stays out of sight,

He's cold, lonely on a quiet, dark night.

 

He feels angry, abandoned, betrayed,

He doesn't realize he's hidden in the shade.

He's blind, he can't see.

He finds himself having to flee.

He runs from his problems that he already made,

He comes accross a puzzle, only he has the key.

 

He gives any will he has left to spare,

Finds that recovery is not too rare.

Gives his life over to a forgiving, higher power

His resentments are pushed off this selfish tower,

Discovers that he can live life, hour by hour.

Amends his wrongs, and tries to care.

So this isn't too bad for him to bare.

 

His eyes are open, he is reborn.

His life, his heart, no longer torn.

[yeawutever]

Well written poem!!!!!!!!!!

[Steven1607307306]

Thank you! Not too bad. A bit choppy though, but it sounds different the way I read it, than it would normally be read =-/

[BellaDonna]

I really liked your poem.

 

Are there any poetry clubs in your area or places that hold poetry readings?

 

I think you have a knack for it.

 

 

BellaDonna

[Steven1607307306]

No clubs that I am aware of, however I havent looked! Don't know how much competition I'd actually be against people who write all the time though.:splat:

[AnotherBrokenDoll]

woooooooot woooo! That was an amazing poem it really stood out to me. Teach me lolz... I'm kinda speechless it took my breath away.

 

awesum

[SapphireStar]

Wow. That was amazing. Best I've read in a long while. How long have you been writing poetry? You have a natural talent, Steven. Remember, use it to the best of your ability. Wonderful job.

[Steven1607307306]

Been writing for about...3.5 months. From Dec. '05 - Feb.'06; then started again this month.