Alabama Posted November 27, 2004 Share Posted November 27, 2004 Fear Do not come closer For it shall come A fear not seen But one know for it has been Long has it slumbered In it's tireless wake Feeding of the weak Like eating a steak It is darkness all around Evil in its wake Nothing can stop it For it is invincible I take As I see it coming I tremble in fear A loud noise is heard One I do not wish to repeat A bang is sounded I am hit to the ground The fear steps out I look with not knowing how things will turn out It steps in front of me Waiting to see If I am hurt So it can feast on me Then I close my eyes And the world goes away My life was pointless as a deer As the hunter drives away… and Mr. Lucky Today was a fine day indeed I found 20 dollars on the street Got a kiss from a girl who I did just meet Because I'm Mr. Lucky I got a promotion at my job I won a car, a Viper, sweet! Didn't get wet in the rain as I walked and talked Because I'm Mr. Lucky I got an A on my test I made new friends, it's the best! Won free tickets to a show! Because I'm Mr. Lucky Didn't picked on by the bullies Got more scoops of ice cream by a man named Louie I was given brand new clothes Because I'm Mr. Lucky I went to an expensive college one day I applied and new I'd get in, while people would say: hoorah! Yet I didn't get in and was sad Because I'm not Mr. Lucky Please tell me what you think! Link to comment
CarterJonas Posted November 27, 2004 Share Posted November 27, 2004 Two good poems, at the either end of the scale. If I could choose my outlook, I'd definitely be the latter. Link to comment
lost_666 Posted November 28, 2004 Share Posted November 28, 2004 wow! they are really good! i started writting poetry but am to shy to show any1! but you definitly have potential there! they are amazing, i especially like the 1st one (fear) tho! Link to comment
troublegal05 Posted December 2, 2004 Share Posted December 2, 2004 Wow i thought your poems were great...My favorite one was Mr. Lucky I can really relate to that.... 8) Link to comment
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