joethe Posted August 27, 2009 Share Posted August 27, 2009 I am going to take my girlfriend out to dinner tomorrow night and surprise her by taking her to a good spot to see the sunset, there i am going to give her this poem. What do you think? what i can i add or delete? I have never ever wrote a poem to a girl so your probably going to laugh. I think of you when I wake up I think of you when I go goodnight Your beauty is truly a remarkable sight I cant wait to spend the rest of my life with you I have realized that all of my dreams because of you have come true Your everything thing I ever wanted, your everything I need My love for you is everlasting indeed Please hold me tight and never let go I promise you our love will continue to grow I love you more as every second goes by Being with you I feel as if I can fly Link to comment
melrich Posted August 27, 2009 Share Posted August 27, 2009 It's from your heart so it is good. Enjoy the night. Link to comment
butterfly07 Posted August 27, 2009 Share Posted August 27, 2009 thats a beautiful poem!! Link to comment
joethe Posted August 27, 2009 Author Share Posted August 27, 2009 thanks, its not too corny is it? Link to comment
joethe Posted August 28, 2009 Author Share Posted August 28, 2009 i revised it a bit. Better?, Worser? I think of you in the morning I think of you at night I get a wonderful feeling in my heart when im with you, and even when we fight I cant wait to spend the rest of my life with you I have realized that all of my dreams because of you have come true Your everything thing I ever wanted, your everything I need My love for you is everlasting indeed Please hold me tight and never let go I promise you our love will always continue to grow Link to comment
anggrace Posted August 28, 2009 Share Posted August 28, 2009 "I get a wonderful feeling in my heart when im with you, and even when we fight" I think you should replace the above with what you originally had... "Your beauty is truly a remarkable sight" Either way, it's really sweet. Have fun! Link to comment
kaz1 Posted August 28, 2009 Share Posted August 28, 2009 Great poem! She is going to love it. Link to comment
butterfly07 Posted August 28, 2009 Share Posted August 28, 2009 I agree with anggrace, you should replace that line back to the original She will love it i'm sure. Let us know how it went. Link to comment
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