My poem

[Lain]

I'm awake in the cold

I need to share

I wonder why there is noone

to care

 

Nowhere to hide

Nowhere to run

I lose the ability of having

fun

 

I watch my life

Time passes fast

I know that my current state

can't last

 

I am a sinner

I'm not a saint

I will say that the prize I pay

make me faint

 

There is pain

I'm forced to hide

The beautiful me rottens

inside

 

I'm halfway there

I continue the fall

The problem is you don't know me

at all

 

An infinite loop

I wish I could cry

Indifference, loneliness have made me

dry

 

I'm all alone

It is oh so wrong

There is only me in this world

and my song

 

I don't give up

I am still there

I let you know it is hard

to bear

 

It cannot happen

I must win the fight

I'm sure you don't want me dead,

right?

 

 

Thank you for the attention.

[kuhl282000]

very very nice lain....thanks for sharing it with all of us.

 

 

warm regards

 

kuhl

[AF Model]

awesome that's all i have to say....it definitely expresses my feelings, I wish I could come put my feelings to use like that. If you have anything else post it.

[neva_black_n_white]

i thought it was a pretty good poem, i got a pretty confusing portrayal of you liking who you were then not, its like you were a sinner but you didnt appreciate rotting inside, and i see the view in some respects but wouldnt it be a reflection of your negative actions and technically your own fault.

 

just my portrayal.

kel

[Lain]

i thought it was a pretty good poem, i got a pretty confusing portrayal of you liking who you were then not, its like you were a sinner but you didnt appreciate rotting inside, and i see the view in some respects but wouldnt it be a reflection of your negative actions and technically your own fault.

 

You are quite right and that impresses me.

 

Anyway, it is a long and complictaed story but you definitely got right some of the aspects. Your last words especially.

[neva_black_n_white]

thanks lain, i wasnt intending in anyway you were a bad person just that maybe things that had happened reflected what you had done. maybe you could tell us the long and complicated story in a post one time, if not, leave it to mystery *smiles*

 

see you around.

kel