EmptySoul Posted January 4, 2007 Share Posted January 4, 2007 So let's discuss What we used to be And what we could have been Make this as painful as possible I know that's what you're aiming for And every complaint I ever had Is out the window It's useless and you think apologies And plans for change Solve everything So tell me how I'm so ****ing unforgiving While I wonder if you ever really say what you mean Do you ever, ever mean what you say? Every time you touch me Things go wrong. -E. Link to comment
neva_black_n_white Posted January 8, 2007 Share Posted January 8, 2007 I really liked your poem. I thought it was effective. It flowed well telling a pretty intense story by the looks of it. i like how its written as it would be said, it gives the poem a sense of reality. pretty irritating sense when the person you strive for seems to destroy you with everything they do Link to comment
Shadows Light Posted January 16, 2007 Share Posted January 16, 2007 Wow.... there's a one, two punch.. left hook. LIKE IT.. Link to comment
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