inspiration Posted March 20, 2005 Share Posted March 20, 2005 these feelings need to be concealed// I got 15 left to hide myself// but i know i won't see you again// 12 and I'm still fallin hard for you// you can't walk out that door without saying you love me// There's 10 more till you should be nothing but a memory// Did everything right, now why isn't everything alright?// 8 left and I'm still questioning where I went wrong// Was it something I said? Something I didn't say? Something you didn't tell me?// cause now i'm at 6 and i'm really needing a friend// Tell me you don't want me now or i'll want you forever// There's 12 down and 4 to go// just let me know before you open that door// Because now I have 2 left to show you how much I love you// I held back tears as you hugged me and said goodbye// I guess 16 bars isn't enough; I'd need a lifetime to express and show you how I feel// something I thought up about a girl i met over the summer. I can't really do poetry so I just shoot for a decent 16 lines and hope it turns out o.k. -.ins Link to comment
Mun Posted March 20, 2005 Share Posted March 20, 2005 I thought it was about going to 16 bars to try and forget a girl ... but good one nonetheless. Got any more? Link to comment
ForAnother Posted March 20, 2005 Share Posted March 20, 2005 Damn, if you made it "going to bars" like muneca said it would be so much cooler to read. I really liked it with that "going to bars" idea rather than making a poem in 16 bars. Cool tho, very cool ForAnother Link to comment
inspiration Posted March 20, 2005 Author Share Posted March 20, 2005 I guess I haven't lived the bar hopping life yet... maybe that's why. I hope I don't find the love of my life in a bar though.... turn out like my mom's relationships... lol -.ins Link to comment
inspiration Posted March 21, 2005 Author Share Posted March 21, 2005 I don't have anymore. I just kind of think this stuff up spur of the moment. Link to comment
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