The Price We Pay -As always comments/criticism are nice-

[mymelancholysoul]

She said she would never leave

She said she would never go

She said I was safe beside her

She said I was better off alone

She said I would win the fight

She never mentioned what It would cost

But then again, It was only my life

 

I gave her my soul on a silver platter

And sealed it with a crimson flow

I sat alone on a white tilled floor

Waiting for her to hold me close

She never came to my home

She never held me close

She never mentioned what it would cost

But then again, It was only my life

 

Her promises came and went

Much like the many years

Each passing day brought little hope

Each night brought bright red screaming

In the midsts of all my anger

Through the shadows of all my tears

Her voice would ring out on high

And say we were in the clear

She never mentioned how much it would cost

But then again, It was only my life

 

She lied to me and I to her

We gave our word of secrecy

She said she would never betray me

I swore to never admit the pain

But to keep this all inside

To pretend and fade away

Did more to me than she will ever know

Sometimes she was good

Other times she was bad

The only thing that stayed for certain was

She never mentioned how much it would cost

 

So yeah, its not my best work....and I hope not my worst lol. I am still working on the title and maybe even the wording...Enjoy or not, its all up to you.

[elveden]

It's exellent!?

 

I'm impressed with that..

[ForAnother]

I agree not your best. Your past one was amazing... I enjoyed this one too... some good stuff. You use crimson I am seeing in your writing quite a bit. Variety perhaps? Still liked the ideas put down. Perhaps look for your stronger ideas and condense it?

 

All in all, I really enjoy your style of writing. It just feels good to read.

 

Get another one out there, I really enjoy reading your stuff.

 

ForAnother