The Poetry Game

[Capricorn3]

On milk flowers and splendor, a round sky fire burns

While Sweet Baby Jesus rocks his ghost-manger in the sky

I am all sad and wondering why

It's such a beautiful day but only want to cry

The Christ child rocks n rolls, Apollo's light will never return

Before the cows come home and this day adjourns

 

Oh sweet Efron let me be the Lucky One, pollinate my sticky saffron under the blazing sun

So we may unite and live forever more, without pain and sadness that we had before

Let our love not be dead in a tomb like Mr and Mrs Montague, never let our be done

and when the light turns black and deep, may embers crackle lest we sleep

Surrendering a left eye, then a right, to the marauders of dreams

For nowhere in your roiling slumber can the endless horseman find his home

Full of pain wand impossible sadness , here I shall forever rest, no more to roam alone

 

It is now sad sweet Efron that roams alone, to seek again the horseman's love

And as the horseman swiftly rides, he espies a solitary dove

Held in a hawks jaw, no sign of life it gives

Until the mighty clawed creature, dreading its own vice, yawps from knotty beak

And the lifeless blood doth leak

[tiredofvampires]

WOW, Cap! That's brilliant.

 

Just a note to my fellow mad cut-and-pasters, though:

 

In my line (right above Cap's),

 

"Until the mighty clawed creature, dreading its own vice, screams from knotty beak"

 

I changed "screams" to "yawps"...because "screams" was just kind of meh.

 

So make sure to change that bit next time around. YAWPS. I know Cap got to it faster than I could edit it. I'm slow on the edit draw.

[Capricorn3]

There ya go, I edited it to "yawped". Good stuff ToV!

 

Btw, should that be "yawps" or "yawped"?

[tiredofvampires]

Ha, I caught that, yes -- so I went back and turned MY "yawped" into "yawps"! (I was on the fence about tense -- another great rhyme, btw.)

 

So now you have to go back and turn "yawped" into "yawps," in yours, I'm afraid!

 

Sorry to make you do this, Cap. What a run-around! LOL! But I made it in the nick of time to make it "yawps", so I'm stoked! And now I'm sticking to it!

 

(see my "reason for edit" below my post, hehe)

[Capricorn3]

Done! I love this poem!! lol

[Capricorn3]

On milk flowers and splendor, a round sky fire burns

While Sweet Baby Jesus rocks his ghost-manger in the sky

I am all sad and wondering why

It's such a beautiful day but only want to cry

The Christ child rocks n rolls, Apollo's light will never return

Before the cows come home and this day adjourns

 

Oh sweet Efron let me be the Lucky One, pollinate my sticky saffron under the blazing sun

So we may unite and live forever more, without pain and sadness that we had before

Let our love not be dead in a tomb like Mr and Mrs Montague, never let our be done

and when the light turns black and deep, may embers crackle lest we sleep

Surrendering a left eye, then a right, to the marauders of dreams

For nowhere in your roiling slumber can the endless horseman find his home

Full of pain wand impossible sadness , here I shall forever rest, no more to roam alone

 

It is now sad sweet Efron that roams alone, to seek again the horseman's love

And as the horseman swiftly rides, he espies a solitary dove

Held in a hawks jaw, no sign of life it gives

Until the mighty clawed creature, dreading its own vice, yawps from knotty beak

And the lifeless blood doth leak

So justice is found where the proud eagles reign.

[Capricorn3]

No-one playing no more?

 

On milk flowers and splendor, a round sky fire burns

While Sweet Baby Jesus rocks his ghost-manger in the sky

I am all sad and wondering why

It's such a beautiful day but only want to cry

The Christ child rocks n rolls, Apollo's light will never return

Before the cows come home and this day adjourns

 

Oh sweet Efron let me be the Lucky One, pollinate my sticky saffron under the blazing sun

So we may unite and live forever more, without pain and sadness that we had before

Let our love not be dead in a tomb like Mr and Mrs Montague, never let our be done

and when the light turns black and deep, may embers crackle lest we sleep

Surrendering a left eye, then a right, to the marauders of dreams

For nowhere in your roiling slumber can the endless horseman find his home

Full of pain wand impossible sadness , here I shall forever rest, no more to roam alone

 

It is now sad sweet Efron that roams alone, to seek again the horseman's love

And as the horseman swiftly rides, he espies a solitary dove

Held in a hawks jaw, no sign of life it gives

Until the mighty clawed creature, dreading its own vice, yawps from knotty beak

And the lifeless blood doth leak

So justice is found where the proud eagles reign.

 

A clouded dream on an earthly night

Hangs upon a crescent moon

[Donovan79]

I adore the "yawped" line. Walter White would be proud.

[quantumst8]

On milk flowers and splendor, a round sky fire burns

While Sweet Baby Jesus rocks his ghost-manger in the sky

I am all sad and wondering why

It's such a beautiful day but only want to cry

The Christ child rocks n rolls, Apollo's light will never return

Before the cows come home and this day adjourns

 

Oh sweet Efron let me be the Lucky One, pollinate my sticky saffron under the blazing sun

So we may unite and live forever more, without pain and sadness that we had before

Let our love not be dead in a tomb like Mr and Mrs Montague, never let our be done

and when the light turns black and deep, may embers crackle lest we sleep

Surrendering a left eye, then a right, to the marauders of dreams

For nowhere in your roiling slumber can the endless horseman find his home

Full of pain wand impossible sadness , here I shall forever rest, no more to roam alone

 

It is now sad sweet Efron that roams alone, to seek again the horseman's love

And as the horseman swiftly rides, he espies a solitary dove

Held in a hawks jaw, no sign of life it gives

Until the mighty clawed creature, dreading its own vice, yawps from knotty beak

And the lifeless blood doth leak

So justice is found where the proud eagles reign.

 

A clouded dream on an earthly night

Hangs upon a crescent moon

Where summer solstice meets Luna waning

[Moontiger]

On milk flowers and splendor, a round sky fire burns

While Sweet Baby Jesus rocks his ghost-manger in the sky

I am all sad and wondering why

It's such a beautiful day but only want to cry

The Christ child rocks n rolls, Apollo's light will never return

Before the cows come home and this day adjourns

 

Oh sweet Efron let me be the Lucky One, pollinate my sticky saffron under the blazing sun

So we may unite and live forever more, without pain and sadness that we had before

Let our love not be dead in a tomb like Mr and Mrs Montague, never let our be done

and when the light turns black and deep, may embers crackle lest we sleep

Surrendering a left eye, then a right, to the marauders of dreams

For nowhere in your roiling slumber can the endless horseman find his home

Full of pain wand impossible sadness , here I shall forever rest, no more to roam alone

 

It is now sad sweet Efron that roams alone, to seek again the horseman's love

And as the horseman swiftly rides, he espies a solitary dove

Held in a hawks jaw, no sign of life it gives

Until the mighty clawed creature, dreading its own vice, yawps from knotty beak

And the lifeless blood doth leak

So justice is found where the proud eagles reign.

 

A clouded dream on an earthly night

Hangs upon a crescent moon

Where summer solstice meets Luna waning

Artemis aims her bow, the deer and sheep running

[Donovan79]

On milk flowers and splendor, a round sky fire burns

While Sweet Baby Jesus rocks his ghost-manger in the sky

I am all sad and wondering why

It's such a beautiful day but only want to cry

The Christ child rocks n rolls, Apollo's light will never return

Before the cows come home and this day adjourns

 

Oh sweet Efron let me be the Lucky One, pollinate my sticky saffron under the blazing sun

So we may unite and live forever more, without pain and sadness that we had before

Let our love not be dead in a tomb like Mr and Mrs Montague, never let our be done

and when the light turns black and deep, may embers crackle lest we sleep

Surrendering a left eye, then a right, to the marauders of dreams

For nowhere in your roiling slumber can the endless horseman find his home

Full of pain wand impossible sadness , here I shall forever rest, no more to roam alone

 

It is now sad sweet Efron that roams alone, to seek again the horseman's love

And as the horseman swiftly rides, he espies a solitary dove

Held in a hawks jaw, no sign of life it gives

Until the mighty clawed creature, dreading its own vice, yawps from knotty beak

And the lifeless blood doth leak

So justice is found where the proud eagles reign.

 

A clouded dream on an earthly night

Hangs upon a crescent moon

Where summer solstice meets Luna waning

Artemis aims her bow, the deer and sheep running,

As Rhyme and Rhythm cull their dwindling flock

[quantumst8]

We should make up a pseudonym and enter these kinds of poems in contests.

[tiredofvampires]

I adore the "yawped" line. Walter White would be proud.

 

Why thank you. Walt Whitman might also nod in assent, d'you think?

 

We should make up a pseudonym and enter these kinds of poems in contests.

 

You mean, one collective pseudonym?

 

 

 

On milk flowers and splendor, a round sky fire burns

While Sweet Baby Jesus rocks his ghost-manger in the sky

I am all sad and wondering why

It's such a beautiful day but only want to cry

The Christ child rocks n rolls, Apollo's light will never return

Before the cows come home and this day adjourns

 

Oh sweet Efron let me be the Lucky One, pollinate my sticky saffron under the blazing sun

So we may unite and live forever more, without pain and sadness that we had before

Let our love not be dead in a tomb like Mr and Mrs Montague, never let our be done

and when the light turns black and deep, may embers crackle lest we sleep

Surrendering a left eye, then a right, to the marauders of dreams

For nowhere in your roiling slumber can the endless horseman find his home

Full of pain wand impossible sadness , here I shall forever rest, no more to roam alone

 

It is now sad sweet Efron that roams alone, to seek again the horseman's love

And as the horseman swiftly rides, he espies a solitary dove

Held in a hawks jaw, no sign of life it gives

Until the mighty clawed creature, dreading its own vice, yawps from knotty beak

And the lifeless blood doth leak

So justice is found where the proud eagles reign.

 

A clouded dream on an earthly night

Hangs upon a crescent moon

Where summer solstice meets Luna waning

Artemis aims her bow, the deer and sheep running,

As Rhyme and Rhythm cull their dwindling flock

The pearl-white skin of Shantibella brings hand to drum, beat to Efron's heartbeat,

[Donovan79]

We should make up a pseudonym and enter these kinds of poems in contests.

 

I keep hoping a budding singer/guitarist will turn up on this board, record it, and throw it on YouTube for us. Didn't someone recently post about being a musician??

 

Why thank you. Walt Whitman might also nod in assent, d'you think?

 

Absolutely, especially as Walter White was paying homage to Walt Whitman...

[quantumst8]

 

 

 

You mean, one collective pseudonym?

 

Yes...........

[tiredofvampires]

Absolutely, especially as Walter White was paying homage to Walt Whitman...

 

Come to find, there are a few illustrious Walter Whites out there (one, fictional). I'm only familiar with the NAACP guy, and even then, not that familiar. So I'm not sure which one was invoking Walt Whitman. bluh

[tiredofvampires]

And actually, I'd like to hear this sung and played on the banjo.

 

I love banjo.

[Donovan79]

Come to find, there are a few illustrious Walter Whites out there (one, fictional). I'm only familiar with the NAACP guy, and even then, not that familiar. So I'm not sure which one was invoking Walt Whitman. bluh

 

Breaking Bad is the best show ever made.

[Moontiger]

Hey, would anyone like to start a new poem? I think the one we have is freaking awesome and I want to see what else we can come up with! I'll even throw out an opening line:

 

Under the purple lemon tree we talk and laugh of many things

[Capricorn3]

Under the purple lemon tree we talk and laugh of many things

The stories are woven

And fortunes are told

[Capricorn3]

Under the purple lemon tree we talk and laugh of many things

The stories are woven

And fortunes are told

^^ Maybe that should all be in one line....

 

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Under the purple lemon tree we talk and laugh of many things

The stories are woven and fortunes are told

[tiredofvampires]

Under the purple lemon tree we talk and laugh of many things

The stories are woven

And fortunes are told

So honey child, harken to this one which never grows old.

[tiredofvampires]

Breaking Bad is the best show ever made.

 

So I've been learning, reading up on it. I always learn so much stuff on this site.

 

But Cheers'll be hard to top.

[tiredofvampires]

^^ Maybe that should all be in one line....

 

I was kinda wondering about that, myself...seeing as how we each get a line at a time (technically)...and maybe it works better as one?

 

Check if you're still in the edit window! Don't do as I do...haha....

[Capricorn3]

ToV: You should edit your's now, as I edited it into one line (post #47) after I noticed it looked a little odd, lol.