i_hate_the_world47 Posted August 30, 2004 Share Posted August 30, 2004 The only thing wrong is me With a knife in one hand, a gun in the other I write my last words say bye to my mother Wonder where my life went so wrong Why I ended up singing this sad song But then it becomes clear and I can see That the only thing wrong with my world is me Cant take the drama of this sad life So I live by my rusty knife Slice and dice and bleed me gone I have suffered here to long You ask me why I live this way Why I sink lower everyday I answer you with the truth The story of my sad youth With a knife in one hand, a gun in the other Write my last words say bye to my mother Wonder where my life went so wrong Why I ended up singing this sad song But then it becomes clear and I can see That the only thing wrong with my world is me Drunken father breath of death I drown out the screams like I am deaf Beaten child broken dreams Fallen angel broken wings I grasp for air his clutch so tight But its done, he's won the fight I am bleeding but not dead Yet all these games mess with my head So I sit and write my story With screams and yells and a touch gory With a knife in one hand, a gun in the other Write my last words say bye to my mother Wonder where my life went so wrong Why I ended up singing this sad song But then it becomes clear and I can see That the only thing wrong with my world is me So my story is out sad but true I ask not sympathy but love from you As my soul darkens I make a final try Before this soul begins to die comments are greatly appreciated. ~Meagan~ Link to comment
mysteryman Posted August 30, 2004 Share Posted August 30, 2004 i cant stand pesiistic stuff like that i mean i keep seeing all these susicide and poems about depression.. u have talent and itd be great if you used it for something optomistically not poems about suicide and stuff i mean come on .. its getting old in my opinion.enjoy life while you can.. cause life is too short and you cant enjoy life if/when ur dead like you write about mysteryman Link to comment
i_hate_the_world47 Posted August 30, 2004 Author Share Posted August 30, 2004 hey mystery if you dont like what i write about,then dont comment. ~meagan~ Link to comment
under_the_pressure Posted August 30, 2004 Share Posted August 30, 2004 Meagan, That poem was great. I've felt that way many times. Keep writing. I know it helps. I'm always here too. You know that. hugs always* under Link to comment
mtastic Posted August 30, 2004 Share Posted August 30, 2004 I like it, its more lyrical than your other poems. I guess from the line "Why I ended up singing this sad song," you intended this to be a song. I know how you feel, I get that way sometimes too, thinking the only thing between me and my hapiness is myself. I guess all one can do is soldier on, and hope things will get better as we go along. Keep up the great work, mtastic Link to comment
i_hate_the_world47 Posted August 30, 2004 Author Share Posted August 30, 2004 thanx guys.Ya it was meant to be a song.I am glad some people liked it. ~Meagan~ Link to comment
dpressedone89 Posted August 30, 2004 Share Posted August 30, 2004 ok, i agree with mysteryman, you do have great talent, and the poem is wonderful but it would be nice to see such talent in an uplifting poem, and not to be mean but his comment is just as welcome as everyone elses, not all oppinions are roses and candy, but the poem was well written -stitches aka The Antihero Link to comment
mysteryman Posted August 30, 2004 Share Posted August 30, 2004 Im sorry if u got mad and thanks dpress for agreeing with me.. i mean why do u want be so pesimistic? Its a good poem but its so dam depressing and it was well written i suggest use ur talent for good remember lifes too short to be pesimistic mysteryman Link to comment
i_hate_the_world47 Posted August 30, 2004 Author Share Posted August 30, 2004 well i write all my poetry based on life and how i feel.Thats how i felt when i wrote it. Link to comment
dpressedone89 Posted August 31, 2004 Share Posted August 31, 2004 im sorry you were feeling so down when you wrote it, i hope you happier and in a more opptimistic mood than before, cheers -stitches aka The Antihero Link to comment
mysteryman Posted August 31, 2004 Share Posted August 31, 2004 you really felt like killing urslef? i mean yet again me and dpress agree..lol i do hope ur optoistic? and happy and do u write poems like that.. of optomim and happiness? Mysteryman Link to comment
hardcore Posted September 1, 2004 Share Posted September 1, 2004 i really could feel where you were comeing from on this one it was great. meagen you know that i to will aways be here foryou . i can stress this fact enogth . i love your work but you allready know that . your friend aways hardcore but if you like you can call me steve. 8) Link to comment
behind_these_eyes Posted September 2, 2004 Share Posted September 2, 2004 I thought that was really good, you're good at rhyming things without making them seem like you just put them there to rhyme and sound good without meaning. (which is something I can't do haha) keep writing, and who cares if it's not about a pony or a rainbow, at least it's great, honest writing. Link to comment
i_hate_the_world47 Posted September 2, 2004 Author Share Posted September 2, 2004 Well thank you behind_these_eyes.I am glad you enjoyed it.For what iot was not what it said. ~Meagan~ Link to comment
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