Caesium Posted December 6, 2007 Share Posted December 6, 2007 This is a little poem i just wrote. Any feedback would be good. It's about a guy falling in love with some girl, And he waits for her and waits for her, but she doesn't show. The message that i was trying to convey was 'You only live once, Make the most of it. Don't wait around for love, Go out and find it' Im sitting in the dark Trying to solve the riddles of my heart There's something about you I knew it was there from the start. All our lives We've worked to build a path I'll sit at the edge And wait for you to arrive All this waiting I counted a thousand flies All on my own Looks like you never showed Link to comment
Happiness0321 Posted December 6, 2007 Share Posted December 6, 2007 I like it a lot! Thanks! Link to comment
Censored Posted December 6, 2007 Share Posted December 6, 2007 Hi caesium, I like it........ Didn't quite fit for me with your rationale though. Link to comment
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