some poetry i wrote after my mom died, any good?

[hutch007]

here are a bunch of poems i have written and ide like to share them with you guys, please tell me what you think.

 

 

On a beach never forgotten

 

On a beach never forgotten,

You lay there soaking up the sun,

Watching the 3 of us at play,

Looking dumb as it takes 3 of us to wrestle with a single fish,

Then only to be showed up at the Island by out-digging all of us in the search for littlenecks,

Loading up the boat, was never a hassle with you to remind us where to put certain things,

On the way home, stopping at our 3 lonely lobster pots,

Waiting with anticipation for that first lobster we’ve ever caught,

Only to see an endless supply of spider crabs.

Coming home later that day, with a boat full of fish, and other billingsgate treasures

We remember how great the day was, and no day will ever be exactly the same.

A last sunset night

On a last sunset night,

With the last wisps of light,

All the colors of the setting sun,

Be reflected upon your warm face,

Remembering all the years that have gone past,

Taking it all in at your own pace,

Wishing for it all to never end,

Waving to a set of impatient fisherman, and walking back with the other few

Saying the final goodbye and going on the short walk home,

The sand seeping through your toes and the loved ones by your side,

We watch you disappear down the beach, the warm wind blowing around you,

Not knowing that this would be your,

Last sunset night.

May 12, 2007

 

A Hearts Story

Ever heart has a story to tell,

Although every one can spill their words,

The heart can never say it all,

From a hearts first love,

To its last heart break,

Someone can try to explain it all,

But trying to find the time is just to hard,

The heart will always change,

It has a mind of its own,

A thousand words can not tell one sentence,

The only way to explain,

Is through this lone tear in my eye,

If only it could fall,

That would say it all,

That alone can tell a hearts story.

 

Loving Memory

In loving memory of you is all it says,

But the whole story is only told through those who loved,

Wanting you is our way of thinking,

Thinking of the good times,

And the hard times ahead,

Wishing for that day to have never come,

Seeing your face in that picture frame,

Upon that wooden stand,

Waiting for that day to be with you again,

It’s all I can think,

But with your blood flowing through my veins,

And guessing your last wishes,

I will carry on knowing I have your strength within,

But all I can read,

In loving memory.

 

A lonely Night

It is another lonely night,

Sitting here, thinking of you,

Wishing you were still here so I would not have to be this way,

Trying to think I’m still wanted,

By those who said they did,

Only to be forgotten but one day later,

Waiting for that call, and having it never come,

It seems as though, I am remembered only for this tragic time,

But all I feel is another night alone,

With only me, myself and I

Years have passed

The years have passed,

And now that you are not here, they seem to drag on forever,

Remembering all those times,

Where we talked and spoke to one another,

Trying to forget those who have forgotten me,

Thinking of who really cares,

And who really doesn’t

Sifting through those who say one thing and mean another,

But it doesn’t matter for now, because I know,

That you will always be with me in my heart,

And even though my heart aches for you to be here,

I can only think,

What if I had been better?

In the years that have passed.

One week later

It’s only been one week later,

Life seems to drag on forever,

Why is this feeling sustaining,

Just waiting for this first tear to fall,

I sit here thinking,

As each hour goes by,

Waiting as time creeps to a slower pace,

But I am still sitting here,

With a lone tear in my eye,

It will still be there,

But one week later.

A lasting memory

It had been such a long time,

But since these last few weeks,

Our old memories have been restored,

To what they were once before,

Before life became such a hassle,

Now we remember how it used to be,

The laughs and the tears together,

But soon life will separate us once again,

This time we have more times to keep,

In our lasting memories.

An early summer night

A fire is blazing,

The sky is clear,

But one cloud streaks,

accross the bright midnight moon,

Looking out on the moonlit and fire burnt waters,

I see nothing but your face, reflecting back at me,

Thinking of you all the time,

Everything is different,

But knowing you are at peace,

Leaves me with a full filled empty heart,

Seeing the pictures of you, leaving a tear on my page.

A feeling gone away

Tis a feeling gone away,

Gone by the loss of so much,

Thinking how dumb I am, to think such a way,

When being granted so much,

All I can do, is be saddened by the loss,

Only wanting to be done,

Sitting here now,

Thoughts running through my mind,

Thinking how life could be,

If only I hadn’t of lost you.

A dream

A dream of you,

Sticks in my head,

One night thinking of you,

Sits in my mind like lead,

It starts with us all, sitting side by side,

Only moments later,

Seeing you up front with my father,

Standing there, as if it was your wedding day,

To only be reunited by our sides, in the pew,

Singing joyful songs, at that time,

But the only think I could do as I woke,

Was to have tears stream down my face,

As I remember the words,

In loving memory

A simple little poem

Its only poems that I can write,

That expresses what I say,

But I can only be a fool,

Because I can ever duplicate the thought I have of you,

So many thoughts, they can never be told,

Not in a little poem,

Nor a thousands pages,

But the words of your lips, and wishes of your heart,

Will always be remembered,

When we think of you.

Another night alone

6/3/07

It’s another night alone,

I sit here pondering,

Why it’s always like this,

I try to be together with others,

But im always held back for reasons that are too numerous to count.

It seems like im so far from those I love,

Even if they are down the hall, or down the street,

Sitting here in the dark,

Makes one realize,

How life is so worthless,

After trying and always having to give up.

A reason to be forgotten

6/3/07

I am a reason to be forgotten,

Why I am here I have no idea,

I will never be as good,

And have no reason to be,

Wishing these feeling in my heart would leave,

But the pain is always brought up, as soon as it starts to disperse,

Reasons to forget me are so true,

I have nothing to offer or give,

My poems mean nothing,

They are as empty as my heart wants to be,

And as I sit here,

I find myself thinking, why I have not left already,

And this reason could be my last,

Just wanting everything to be different,

A time without me,

A spot where I will be filled,

By something better than I

So I will end up being,

A reason to be forgotten.

A feeling gone away

6/3/07

My heart has been replaced,

By a feeling gone away,

Everything I once wanted has been torn from me,

Can never be seen again,

I see no reason,

To keep going,

I have no strength to care,

Life is a task now that will lead me nowhere,

Ide rather my life be spared to those who care,

Than to myself,

With a heart gone away.

A nightmare realized

6/3/07

Continuously feeling lost,

I don’t think I will ever be found,

Nightmares run through my head,

Of losing my all,

I am so scared, of losing everyone,

I wish for everything to be different,

I want everything to be normal,

I feel as though everything is wrong,

Things just aren’t right,

Work and death, running through my head,

Thoughts of every kind,

Losing everyone and everything is a constant threat,

I don’t know why, but I can’t lose the thought,

Because it’s all so true,

I’m going to be alone one day,

Going to be crazy forever

And my nightmare will come true.

A Heart of nothing

6/4/2007

I offered you my heart,

But all I got in return,

Was the same lonely heart?

That I had to offer,

Sitting here now,

Wondering the worth of my love,

Feeling as though,

It’s a value of none,

Been turned down, so many times before

You were the one, who opened up to me,

But no that I have lost,

I having nothing else to give,

But my heart of nothing

What my eyes have seen

June 6, 2007

What my eyes have seen,

Is that of what no one wants to?

I wish I could get rid of these memories,

Seeing everything again in my head

Just reminds me of the pain,

From that night till now.

I still imagine the pain,

My eyes have seen so much,

I wish to never relive it

But my sadness brings it all back

To what I’ve seen, again and again.

Re-living those last hours

Wondering how it will end

I could only imagine a nightmare,

But I wish my love could have saved you

Even though that nightmare came true,

And even if I do wake every day.

Awaking to a nightmare,

That never should have come true,

But it all comes back to what I have seen

In the sadness of my heart.

Drifting

June 5, 2007

I am drifting from you

Like a raft on water

My thoughts drag me away

As if I’m tied down

I can’t get back

Trying to go home

To the way it was

But I am drifting from you

And I have no power left

To come and see you

So this is a final chapter

To a lost way

As if it was all drifting away.

I Don’t Know Why

June 5, 2007

I don’t know why I have lost

Lost this feeling, gone so far from me

Wishing I could have it back

But knowing it has slipped through my fingers

I don’t know what to say

But goodbye.

Every Strength is a Weakness

6/9/07

Because everyone has a strength,

It is also their weakness,

From boldness to crowdedness,

From sport to brains,

A combination of any which,

Can cause many pains,

It is a power that one may keep,

Or also kill,

Its writing that you say is mine,

But it is a weakness,

A weakness that I don’t want looked upon,

Something that means nothing,

My dear words are useless,

In this desperate time of needs,

Because ever strength does have a weakness.

Change

6/21/07

What is this feeling of change?

Everything was once just so,

Now it is all screwed up, with one big blow,

Many events have lead to this,

But one final impact,

Just tore me apart,

My insides are gone, ripped away,

What I once had has been changed.

 

 

thanx of those who read them all

god bless

[Taking The Lead]

Sorry about your mother.

 

Hope you're not feeling too down.

 

I didn't read that massive thing, but if it's from the heart, who am I to judge?

[Soulhi123]

Wow..I am very sorry for your losses. I just hope I would be able to do anything as good as what you did with these poems. Excellent poems my friend. I hope you are coping well. My favorite was the one with the starting line "In Loving Memory".