read and reply please.

[NKP]

Have you ever felt so alone

but so many people around

have you ever loved someone

who didnt love you

have you felt so free, so happy

then woke up it was just a dream

have you lost someone close

and didnt get a chance to say goodbye

have you even been so hurt

that the only answer is to let go

have you ever locked yourself in your room

just so you can slowly die

i have, but who cares right

 

 

Now your gone

you killed yourself

did you care about me

im lost and confused

and no longer want to go on

cut me

cut me deep

rip out me heart

then all my insides

i dont got a choice

i must end this pain

i grabed the rope just like you daddy

tied it around my neck

now im just hanging here

hanging there dead

just like you daddy

 

I know these suck but i just posted them here anyway

[CynicalGuitarist]

art and poetry doesn't suck, at long as it isn't coming from me.

[yeawutever]

Clever poem!!!!!!!!

[PRSOV]

I really like the first one

[Daddy Bear]

you are really in touch with your pain. the ones who aren't, they worry me.

[Boughtandpaidfor]

Have you noticed how standard replies in the poems forum are all one-liners? I wonder what the reason for that is? Maybe we don't want to criticise, maybe this is just a pitstop between threads.

 

Maybe all these poems are just for ourselves and there isn't much anyone can say.

 

Anyway... I liked your poem and I've felt all those things too

[NKP]

Have you noticed how standard replies in the poems forum are all one-liners? I wonder what the reason for that is? Maybe we don't want to criticise, maybe this is just a pitstop between threads.

 

Maybe all these poems are just for ourselves and there isn't much anyone can say.

 

Anyway... I liked your poem and I've felt all those things too

 

So true it is only one line,

 

well thank you everyone for taking the time to read them and thanks Happytown, slightybent, PRSOV, Ailec1987 and cynicalGuitarist for your replys

[AwdreeHpburn]

Kita - i agree with who said you're in touch with your pain.

 

Your poetry is touching and profound. I like it because I can relate in part but also because I can sympathise.

 

You write well and use your words well, I feel like I understand how you're feeling.

 

I'm sorry for your loss.

 

I hope you'll keep expressing your thoughts and feelings through the art of writing....

 

Thanks for sharing.

 

-T

[NKP]

Ta ree Saw thank you i never knew anyone would like them