i_hate_the_world47 Posted August 10, 2004 Share Posted August 10, 2004 Twinkle Twinkle on a knife Watch as this girl takes her life She leaves no note,not a single goodbye In such a hurry to quit and die Her one true love broke her heart But it was a mistake from the start He led her on so it seems Thier love was just a bunch of dreams Her mother didnt understand her father didnt care Her life worth nothing more than warm air But this warm air soon became cold As her dull life soon grew cold So a knife in one hand a picture in the other An everlasting memorie of her mother As she presses blades to skin She is letting death win Blood is everywhere this young girl is the supplier Her soul burns in hell engulfed in fire Yet this is like heaven compared to life So much coruption from a knife. Comment?Greatly appreciated. ~Meagan~ Link to comment
Stinkweed Posted August 10, 2004 Share Posted August 10, 2004 That's an amazing poem... It's very sad, though (I hope everything turns out fine... we all care about you). It has an excellent use of rhythm and reflects very strong feelings. You really have a way with words. Great job =D>. Link to comment
Kakster Posted August 10, 2004 Share Posted August 10, 2004 Scary. We all feel that way at some point in our lifes. I'd like to read one about rebirth though. Link to comment
under_the_pressure Posted August 10, 2004 Share Posted August 10, 2004 Wow, that was an amazing poem. Good work! under* Link to comment
ComputerGuy Posted August 12, 2004 Share Posted August 12, 2004 That was an awesome poem, can't wait to read some more. Link to comment
dpressedone89 Posted August 13, 2004 Share Posted August 13, 2004 nice, good job keep writing Link to comment
hardcore Posted August 14, 2004 Share Posted August 14, 2004 hey i just want you to know i love your pomes they bring a tear to my eye to hear such sweet things ps i loved it alot Link to comment
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