POEM # 1

[bruind]

lying in bed at night, staring blankly at the ceiling,

tossing and turning as my mind goes wondering,

droplets of tears falling as the memories of you fill my mind,

the image of your face and sweet smile, now i'll leave behind.

 

goodbye now to the one i used to have -- my dear love,

goodbye to your enchanting voice -- the music to my ears,

despair and solitude are now my only companion,

for you my love is no longer beside me -- today and tomorrow.

 

goodbye to the mesmerizing scent of your perfume,

that used to envelope me everytime you're around,

goodbye to the warmth your embrace used to give,

for now i have to let your arms go.

 

oh baby, i miss you now more than ever...

but i have to accept, you're not mine any longer,

so God help me bury all these that i feel.

and start a new life, without the one who gave meaning to my life...

 

 

so what you guys think of my poem? my first time again since high school...

hope you like it.

[i_hate_the_world47]

Amazing poem.It had alot of emotion in it.Good Job.

 

~Meagan~

[black_magic]

I really liked your poem, i think you used a wide range of methods to express feelings or atleast show them as vissions, i liked the line as you say you were embraced by there perfume ... like an envelope i thought that was pretty impressive.

 

so yeah, i like your poetry!

black magic

[Stinkweed]

Great poem. I really liked it. It's really good, and has so many strong emotions. Great job.

[bruind]

thanks guys...

 

guess those are really just visions... we haven't broken up yet..

though we're going through some hard times right now...

[Stinkweed]

I'm glad they're just visions, then. I hope everything ends up fine. Good luck, and best wishes.

[bruind]

thank you.

[ang3l2004]

Very nice