ang3l2004 Posted July 28, 2004 Share Posted July 28, 2004 If this is the end why do I feel you near, Why is it that when you are not around I want you here. If I dont love and miss you like I say, Why do I think about you each and everyday. If I would have never met you things would not be like this, But then I would never have felt you and felt that special kiss. You know I would do anything I could for you, But would you do the same for me to. When I am with you I am so happy inside, I let go of the pain and all of the times I have cried. But when you leave everything comes back bad, I start to think is this real and get sad. I want you to know that deep within my heart, I love you so much and I hate to be apart. I hope that you tell me you love and miss me to, I feel my life is not as good without you. You make the sun shine and you make me smile, You make my life feel like it is worthwhile. I hope that you still love me as much as I love you, Can we start over together start over brand new? by me what do u think??? Link to comment
sayer7 Posted July 28, 2004 Share Posted July 28, 2004 Very Beautiful poem It struck a very familiar chord with me.... you have a talent with words.. Keep on writing... Link to comment
Paul-From-Oz Posted July 28, 2004 Share Posted July 28, 2004 ok angel, let's get back together then eh? just fly over to australia i like this poem as it strikes the many emotions we deal with post-breakup and how we can find more reasons to love someone inside. xox Paul. Link to comment
ang3l2004 Posted July 28, 2004 Author Share Posted July 28, 2004 Thankyou for reading and replying to my poem I appreciate it you all liked it Link to comment
dude21489 Posted July 28, 2004 Share Posted July 28, 2004 It's beautiful... And I agree with sayer7, you have a real talent with words. Link to comment
i_hate_the_world47 Posted July 28, 2004 Share Posted July 28, 2004 Bravo =D> Another wonderful poem.I wish i had your talent ~Meagan~ Link to comment
lunatic Posted July 28, 2004 Share Posted July 28, 2004 Ang3l, You have such a wonderful way with words. You should really try to get your work published out there. You can make a name for yourself because you have a way with words and your feelings. Hubman 8) Link to comment
neva_black_n_white Posted July 28, 2004 Share Posted July 28, 2004 lol to paul from oz, and yeah i thought it was a really beautiful poem i know that i can relate, i used to have doubts like that, but if you believed like the way i did then i can assure you, things do work out kel Link to comment
jaiva Posted July 29, 2004 Share Posted July 29, 2004 I like all of your poems and I don't think less of this one. Continue to write because I like to read them. Jaiva Link to comment
sayer7 Posted July 30, 2004 Share Posted July 30, 2004 I bet you could make this into lyrics for a song. I'm a composer and for some reason right after I heard it I thought I could imagine a melody to go with it... would you mind if I tried to make a song out of it? Link to comment
ang3l2004 Posted July 30, 2004 Author Share Posted July 30, 2004 not at all but keep me posted and let me hear ok thanks all Link to comment
ForAnother Posted August 2, 2004 Share Posted August 2, 2004 Fantastic, got me crying (I am a bit of a wimp when it comes to good poetry). Thank you for sharing that, I am gonna save this one in my file. ForAnother Link to comment
ForAnother Posted August 4, 2004 Share Posted August 4, 2004 Your welcome.. there is something I didn't add before. Your poem is awsome because it has those sweet little rhymes. They aren't extravagent things, it is simply feeling after feeling, and its set up in almost a childish way that you really begin to feel the truth of the whole situation rather than throwing yourself into a deep meaning. It hits you at the surface, and it is a nice feeling ForAnother Link to comment
ang3l2004 Posted August 4, 2004 Author Share Posted August 4, 2004 aww thankyou so much Link to comment
Stinkweed Posted August 4, 2004 Share Posted August 4, 2004 This poem is terrific. You're very talented. I enjoy reading your poems because they have a very good use of rhythm, which I like a lot. =D> Keep up the good work. Link to comment
ang3l2004 Posted August 4, 2004 Author Share Posted August 4, 2004 thankyou very much Link to comment
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