tainted_soul Posted May 30, 2004 Share Posted May 30, 2004 would you please stop pissing all over my face there's never room enough for us two we all take babies, come inside now the graves must run through everyone runs from the sun inside, we make time take to ground all we have found inside, we can't hide come and drown in the sound underneath we take to theives run through stairways we fall over falling far through iron sieves we take to hatchets and hangovers everyone runs from the sun take a time out far from white out take to stealing for your own bore drowing deeper crumbling creeper f****d and begging on the floor Link to comment
NightLily Posted May 30, 2004 Share Posted May 30, 2004 You must be.. one of those intelligent, dark, mysterious guys.. eh? *thinks for a second about this* I'm single Anyways, you seem to write in a very poetic style. You don't seem to use words so much as there literal meanings but more to convey a feeling or mood. Do you care to explain exactly what you are trying to get at by the first stanza? Also, I'm somewhat interested in what exactly .. "inspired" you or prompted you to write this poem. Peace, SuzyQ Link to comment
dpressedone89 Posted May 30, 2004 Share Posted May 30, 2004 actuall you strike me as a musician your poem is thougthful and i agree with the above post you dont go for literal meaning so much as conveying your general message. one of these days i gotta post one of my poems. i think you have talent for poetry you could just as easily be a songwriter it just seems musical with the repetitive everyone runs from the sun its somewhat like a chorus . all in all good job Link to comment
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