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[EmptySoul]

hello. maybe this would be better as lyrics or maybe it just sucks, but i really don't care, i just need to relieve some stress...

 

love mixed with hate

god, it's making me sick

so many lies in those eyes of yours

you think i don't hear the words that they say?

and you're just as guilty as them

LOVING YOU SHOULD BE A SIN

i feel like my heart is in your hands

and you're squeezing it until blood falls to the ground

i'm a walking corpse

empty of everything

except a hate directed everywhere

don't you see what you've done??

i will forget you

forget that i loved you

i will crawl into the darkness and slowly die

burning from the inside from this fire that is my raging sadness, anger, and disappointment.

 

thank you.

 

EmptySoul

[just_smile]

hey

i really liked the first part of your poem, but i though the second (nearer the end) was slightly/really morbid. it was still really good though.

 

this is the bid i liked:

 

love mixed with hate

god, it's making me sick

so many lies in those eyes of yours

you think i don't hear the words that they say?

and you're just as guilty as them

LOVING YOU SHOULD BE A SIN

 

i think it really shows how you are feeling

 

~LJ =;

[EmptySoul]

thank you for reading.

EmptySoul

[kuhl282000]

I liked it.........you have some writing talent keep up the sharing It is appreciated

 

 

 

have a super holiday

 

 

kuhl 8)