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my first poem


Cuu

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i feel like typing retarded things too. not a poet..go easy on me

 

My heart is forever torn

Now that we are apart

My hate grows deeper

Every minute that we've lost

I struggle to survive, cause it's just that hard

My alcohol tolerance rises

And it all made sense

I see the dark clouds

Looming over my head

I slit my wrists

And lay me down to bed

I cry, and now I'm at rest

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I keep saying to all these aspiring poets (not that im a pro but its just what I feel) that poetry doesn't have to rhyme or even make sense to be good, it just has to come from the heart, as urs did, it was good

 

'Poetry without soul is a tree with no leaves''.

 

Keep writing. Practise makes perfect.

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i've read all your poems. you're like the poetic queen on this forum. well, goodnight. i gotta get up in 4 hours. I'm feeling better about myself and I hope everyone out there can feel the same way.

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I have met a new fren ..hello cuu

glad to know that u r afflicted by love too!!

being apart from u r lover is difficult for sure

this thing is one malady for which there is no cure.

 

i am sure the cloud will clear and the sun will shine

u r lover will soon come back to u and say "dear u r mine"

that day will soon come and thats my view

sorry i talked about this and u better not sue!!!!!!!!!!!!

 

hi, cuu....nice to meet a fren who likes writing poems too..(i am a damn amateur though).....

keep posting ....and keep in touch

 

Bye,

CoolGuy

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hello coolguy, what is new?

i am afflicted by love and it looks like you are too!!

being apart is tough and i know i can get through!

there is a cure and it's knowing people like you!!

 

the sun is shining and i am willing to embrace

when my lover comes back i will listen to what she has to say

life goes on and that is my new view

depends on how big your bank account, then maybe i'll sue!!

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