ShySoul Posted November 17, 2005 Share Posted November 17, 2005 I stood there thinking what a lonely life Worlds crumbling down around me Nothing ever goes right, the sorrow grows stronger every day So alone, isolated, cut off from the world Can't let anyone in, my heart will just be hurt Can't risk it being broken again, the pain would kill Keep myself busy, don't think about it It never works, the emptiness consumes I just want to cry, the tears of misery. I stood there thinking what a beautiful life You smiled at me Saw a warmth, a tenderness I had forgotten existed There was hope, there was joy, there was love Made me believe things could work out Put my soul at ease, helped me through the roughest storm Like an angel saving me in my darkest hour My heart no longer empty I just want to cry, the tears of friendship. I stood there thinking this will change my life I've fallen for you, can't fight these feelings Want to be with you, know everything about you To hold you, to touch you, to love you We'll share our souls knowing no one else would understand But why am I racked with doubt? I've waited my life for this, to be in love But something holds me back, paralyzed I just want to cry, the tears of fear. I stood there watching you walk out of my life Never knowing how deeply I cared Now everyday I wonder what could have been You were the one who made me whole, made my life complete But the fool in me couldn't take the risk Couldn't put my heart on the line Now its back to the pain, misery, lonliness of life Back to the cold empty heart I just want to cry, the tears of regret. Link to comment
melrich Posted November 17, 2005 Share Posted November 17, 2005 Very nice Shysoul. I guess this is about unrequited love? If it is personal I hope you get another chance with her. Link to comment
RayKay Posted November 17, 2005 Share Posted November 17, 2005 Very good Shy....and very sad at the same time If it's a true account, I hope that one day you will write a happier-ending to your poem! Link to comment
ShySoul Posted November 17, 2005 Author Share Posted November 17, 2005 Thanks. Its based on observation of both myself and countless others. It's about opening youself up to love when it comes your way. Not being afriad and living in the moment. Who among us has not felt the sharp bite of regret, of not taking action when things were staring us right in the face? So take the chance. Be open. Cause the feeling of never knowing and not trying is the worst feeling of all. Even if it doesn't work out, at least you'll have tried. Link to comment
melrich Posted November 17, 2005 Share Posted November 17, 2005 So take the chance. Be open. Cause the feeling of never knowing and not trying is the worst feeling of all. Even if it doesn't work out, at least you'll have tried. Absolutely...what's the old cliche?...It's better to have loved and lost than never to have loved. Sometimes cliches are just that because they are so true. Link to comment
BillyJean714 Posted November 17, 2005 Share Posted November 17, 2005 Excellent. That was deep Shy, Reading your poetry actually brought tears to my eyes. Link to comment
shorty20 Posted November 17, 2005 Share Posted November 17, 2005 absoultly know how you feel, and it was amazingly written. Thanx for the nice comment on mine too! And don't worry about being afraid of being hurt... i've been like that for 3 years, and I know, eventually, someone will come along into your life that will be worth the risk of being hurt. It will happen, and you'll know it's right! Good luck, and again, amazing poem hun! Link to comment
SheepLy Posted November 17, 2005 Share Posted November 17, 2005 oh wow, that was amazing. awesome work. Link to comment
neva_black_n_white Posted November 17, 2005 Share Posted November 17, 2005 Thats amazing. I really liked your poetry, it flows so weel, its creative and bold. I think youve expressed alot of emotion there, and its raw, i think thats something unique. I can see why you did what you did, if this is more that metaphors, but in a sense you put your heart on the line by losing her. Love always comes round if its true. Great poetry! kell Link to comment
Msnak Posted November 18, 2005 Share Posted November 18, 2005 Shy-- You're simply talented and wise! This poem echoes feelings I've certainly felt before. Wow, good stuff. --Msnak Link to comment
volution Posted November 18, 2005 Share Posted November 18, 2005 Another of life's grand dichotomies: Unwanted love is worse than unrequited love... Yet the not knowing is worse than the knowing... Is it better to believe in a dream, a fantasy, rather than someone shatter it for you? Watching your love walk away, into abuse, is the cruellest fall... Link to comment
ShySoul Posted November 18, 2005 Author Share Posted November 18, 2005 Volution, I ask myself the same question. Is holding out hope better or worse for a person? Is it just a fantasy, a fairy tale? Or will the dream come true? Personally, I think the dream does come true, but it isn't usually in the way we expect it to. So even when we feel the dream is shattered and can never be repaired, its all part of the journey that leads to all our dreams coming true. It is cruel to watch the one you love making a mistake. But we can't beat ourself up over it and let it drag us down (though we usually do). We need to be strong and focus on the bright spots in our lives, being there for the loved one when she needs us. Link to comment
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