stratguy620 Posted August 30, 2005 Share Posted August 30, 2005 I look the to the sky to see your star And I see it shining with another and it shakes me to the core I have fallen from my rock, and for the first time, I am scared I fear nothing more than seeing your arms wrapped around another body, Someone else tasting your love I remember you scratching at my chest, begging to be let in And I want you here to ease my pain, and calm my fears I'm so tired of this sadness I hope distance cures this ailment But I know I must wait until my time has come And then, I will learn of my fate… Link to comment
DropToZero Posted August 30, 2005 Share Posted August 30, 2005 Nice...guessing it's not just poetry, based on your name....possibly a song? Anyways, I like that man...I can relate to that poem really well right now in my life with another...and there's nothing more I like than that, even tho my fears have already seem to come true....till next time, keep writing. Link to comment
stratguy620 Posted August 30, 2005 Author Share Posted August 30, 2005 just some feelings i needed to get out of me about a love that i dont whether ive lost or not... u play guitar? Link to comment
DropToZero Posted August 30, 2005 Share Posted August 30, 2005 just some feelings i needed to get out of me about a love that i dont whether ive lost or not... u play guitar? Whoa man, exactly how I feel....I dont know about love...but, yea...not sure if I've lost or not either... I wrote something about it too...but mine was definitely written during a time when I was a little pissed about the whole thing....let's just say I read something on an online journal of hers that I probably shouldn't have read...and I could literally feel emotions rising. Time goes on, but still I remember that night The words that I heard Tho you act as if everything's alright You're making me sick With this unbearable pain So I'm ending this now I never want to feel this way again It's tearing me apart on the inside These feelings that were so blind Change is for the best this time Because I can feel the anger rising... Not sure if to use 'anger' or 'emotions'...or something tho, I sorta want another word there. Yea I play guitar, and beginning to try and write my own stuff...but it's harder than I thought. Link to comment
volution Posted August 30, 2005 Share Posted August 30, 2005 Nice! It reminds me of Pabulo Neruda's poem "Saddest Poem" - (see here: link removed ). I look the to the sky to see your star And I see it shining with another and it shakes me to the core I have fallen from my rock, and for the first time, I am scared I fear nothing more than seeing your arms wrapped around another body, Someone else tasting your love I remember you scratching at my chest, begging to be let in And I want you here to ease my pain, and calm my fears I'm so tired of this sadness I hope distance cures this ailment But I know I must wait until my time has come And then, I will learn of my fate… Link to comment
stratguy620 Posted August 30, 2005 Author Share Posted August 30, 2005 that was possibly the most beautiful poem ive ever read volution. Ive never read anything else from neruda; is his other stuff in the same vein. I keep reading it over and over and it just seems so true and meaningful to me...thank you Link to comment
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