ApathyKid666 Posted October 20, 2004 Share Posted October 20, 2004 I wrote this after I finished a math test earlier than I thought I would. We had a slam poem (poetry performed to a rythm, hip-hoppish) due the next day for my Poetry and Drama class and this is what I came up with. (By the way, I got an A+ Reminiscense Distilled rainwater Collecting in cracked craters On halved metal plates Shading over blood. No longer boiling. Hidden in rudimentary tin, Shielded from recognition. Sketches, contracts, lies In piles under discolored rags, Wet and withered. From the apathetic answer, To a slowly dying prayer. In the reflections Of countless shattered windows There were droplets of garnet, Descendents of mournful memories; Unreachable yet concrete Refracting directly in front of me Under its crimson rays. Page after page of hypocrisy Overturned by building exasperation Decomposed letter by letter Line by line, story by story. 'Til nothing remained but Charcoaled aspirations set adrift By liberating currents, Never to return. Link to comment
ForAnother Posted October 21, 2004 Share Posted October 21, 2004 NO ONE HAS REPLIED TO THIS!!!! This is great! Man I love it, something about it just got me. The words with their complexity, still have amazing rhythm. The pattern and the feel of it is excellent. A little confused on the message, but all in all great writing. I wanna see some more of your stuff. ForAnother Link to comment
ApathyKid666 Posted October 24, 2004 Author Share Posted October 24, 2004 Thanks for the reply I'll have to set some time apart to write a few more in here. Link to comment
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