Tomorrow

[bluey]

i dont think you know

what pain im in

what you've done

just go away

let me die

cause i don't want to try any more

let me cry

so i can lie to myself again

 

will it be better tomorw

i don't want to say

its hard enough today

all this pain

i'm trying to hide from you

but your smile will get me through

until im alone

and i think about it

and i realise ill never have it to my own

 

alone i stay

in this dismay

until i can forget

those days, your smile,your perfume on my cloths

o please let it be tomorow

[mymelancholysoul]

That would make...such a perfect and beautiful song.

I hope to hear more of your wonderful work in the future...

-->NikNik

[_Lissa_]

it's awsome! it really would make a great song!

[Maynard]

It's really really good.

 

And thats the way i feel right now

[Serendipity1607307077]

That's a very beautiful and heartfelt poem, well done!

[i_hate_the_world47]

Amazing poem.I am sorry your feeling this way.If you EVER need to talk feel free to PM or email me.

 

~meagan~

[under_the_pressure]

Bluey,

 

Sorry I didn't get to this poem sooner. It's a great poem, you have a great way with getting they way you feel out, on paper. I love your poems and hope to see more of them. You know I'm here for you. My arms are open wide, they always will be. You deserve the best, and it'll come, just give it time.

 

hugs,

under*

[ForAnother]

I enjoy the way you write. I like some of your other stuff... I always feel like your last stanzas are the most powerful... I hope one of them will be like all your last stanzas put together. this one:

 

alone i stay

in this dismay

until i can forget

those days, your smile,your perfume on my cloths

o please let it be tomorow

 

Is awsome. Keep on trucking buddy.

 

ForAnother

[EmptySoul]

I really like it. Good job.

 

Empty

[ang3l2004]

wow nice poem