dpressedone89 Posted July 13, 2004 Share Posted July 13, 2004 untitled a noose around my throat and a razor in my hand sorrow in my eyes you have no right to make demands im gonna die but it will be my choice i have no razor to scream with these morbid words have become my voice the regret ive always felt from they day i was forced to be born survived an abortion to pray my death wont be mourned i wish to leave this world and i want no pity no false love or fake compassion i want to choose my death, one of dignity to die from a tree with bleeding wrists a broken neck and overdosed in my viens the pain in my eyes sympothized by my slits the hatred in my life, and my constant pain and as im bleeding saying good bye allow me to not be judged for my decision and now i say farewell its my time to die so my wrist gets slit with quiet precision and as the blood hits the floor and there is nothing left im empty my last memory is seeing you at the door now i lay there nothing inside limp as can be -sTiTcHeS oppinions? Link to comment
johnagent1911 Posted July 13, 2004 Share Posted July 13, 2004 Delightful read -NewYork Post -1911 Link to comment
nothingontheinside Posted July 13, 2004 Share Posted July 13, 2004 =D> Very good, my friend! I like that one a lot, very much emotion. But remember, an untitled poem is like an un-named child! You are the poem's mother and when it is untitled it is still in the womb! *wow kinda a weird analogy* Link to comment
dpressedone89 Posted July 13, 2004 Author Share Posted July 13, 2004 yea kinda weird analogie seeings how im i guy and id actually be the father but no worries.i was waiting for replies befor i named it because i was gonnan throw it out if it wasnt good.(kinda hard to do after the mother analogie) anyway thank you any more comments? -sTiTcHeS Link to comment
under_the_pressure Posted July 13, 2004 Share Posted July 13, 2004 Very nice poem. I enjoyed reading it, and can't wait for you to title it. ~Under~ Link to comment
dpressedone89 Posted July 13, 2004 Author Share Posted July 13, 2004 ok well just a different oppinion i posted this on another site similar to this and the response i got was as follows "i have a suggestion. print that out. then submit it to your trash can. " not very polite anyone disagree with him? -sTiTcHeS Link to comment
under_the_pressure Posted July 13, 2004 Share Posted July 13, 2004 I strongly disagree with him. That was totally rude and he can't see the talent you have. Grr..that makes me angry. We all have our opinions but almost everyone can see this poem is good. Don't listen to him, Stitches. You have a great talent and don't ever stop writing. ~Under~ Link to comment
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