ang3l2004 Posted July 12, 2004 Share Posted July 12, 2004 I am sitting here alone,Holding on holding on to you, You left me I understood I believed you to. You told me you loved me that you cared, You dont even remember the things we shared. I am so stuck I am so confused, I am hurt and my heart is bruised. I want to scream so loud,Loud enough for you to hear, But all I really want is you close to me and near. I want to tell you I still love you and I miss you so much, You dont remember me anymore you dont remember my touch. I am reaching deep down within my heart, To know why this happen when I loved you from the start. Be honest with me dont tell me A lie to make me smile, Tell me the truth and not pretend to make things worthwhile. I cant take this I dont know what to do, You left me alone but I still love you. I am fighting this anger so I dont start to resent, I am writing this poem so I can vent. What else can I do I have tryed so many things, I set you free you have opened your wings. You let everything we had go down the drain, I am so messed up im trying to stay sane. Where is this going to lead where do I go from here, I am sick of the anger sadness and every single tear. I cannot control how things are going to be, But honestly your not opening your eyes to see. I realize im a good person I have so much to give, But together is how I wanted us to live. I have given you all of me every last bit of what I had, My heart is so broken and after all this time im still sad. How is it so hard to be with the person you love, How is it so easy for him to just push me away with a shove. This wall around my heart is not helping me at all, My heart is crying and screaming can you hear the call? They say forgive yourself and everyone to, But its so hard when I thought and believed the one for me was you! by me sorry had to vent not having a good night tell me what you think thanks Link to comment
theallamericanqt Posted July 12, 2004 Share Posted July 12, 2004 Wow! That was really good, maybe because im feeling a lot like you are, bad breakup! Everything flowed really well and it felt like a story! I wouldnt change anything because it helped you get through your feelings and when you look back on it in a while youll remember how you felt, and how you cant understand how you ever felt that way! Link to comment
Blnde_Bombshell Posted July 12, 2004 Share Posted July 12, 2004 Wooah!!! It looks like you put alot of thought and feeling into it. I've noticed the best poetry and songs come out of the times when you really feel down. I like the whole thing. Writing poetry is always a good way to vent your frustrations and emotions. Keep up the good work!! Link to comment
ang3l2004 Posted July 12, 2004 Author Share Posted July 12, 2004 Aww thankyou yeah it is good to vent and when I am down that is when my feelings come out,Poetry is a great way to express how you feel Link to comment
chnrs26 Posted July 12, 2004 Share Posted July 12, 2004 your poem can relate to alot of peoples' relationships because that happens to so many people just like my self.. Link to comment
ang3l2004 Posted July 12, 2004 Author Share Posted July 12, 2004 Yeah I know what you mean it's is really hard but there are many ppl out there going through the same thing and it is far from fun. Link to comment
live_to_love Posted July 12, 2004 Share Posted July 12, 2004 hey that'sa great poem. it show's true emotions, not bounded by anything. it shows the mixed feelings that so many people experience when they go through a breakup. i could really relate to what you were feeling and that added impact. Link to comment
lunatic Posted July 12, 2004 Share Posted July 12, 2004 WOW what a great poem and I can relate to the feelings that are described. I again have to say BRAVO!!!! Good Job Ang3l! Hubman Link to comment
Spellbound Posted July 13, 2004 Share Posted July 13, 2004 Though the punctuation may need a little work, the poem flows smoothly and I can relate to it all. It's truly excellent. Link to comment
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