myplague234 Posted July 6, 2004 Share Posted July 6, 2004 Like a dying fire My feelings for you, inside, retire Everyday i contemplate Everyday i continue to hate All the thngs you have brought upon me Upon up your eyes so you can truly see All the feelings that lie within me I try to remove you from my mind Yet all i've felt cant be left behind So im throwing you away Like a bad memory I erase you and all you've brought My mind becomes a little less distraught And finally i forget all you've taught I loved you, ive hated you i couldnt lieve without you and now, now i cant even look at you just one of my early attempts at poetry...tell me what you guys think....im thinking of it as more lyrical then poetic because i like to write lyrics...but looka t it anyway you want. Link to comment
hurtbylove Posted July 7, 2004 Share Posted July 7, 2004 I'm not good at judging prose, but I really feel like I understand where you are coming from with the words. I still can't look at her without feeling so much pain. I love her from the bottom of my blackened and charred heart. Link to comment
myplague234 Posted July 7, 2004 Author Share Posted July 7, 2004 im sorry with how you feel too...that is what i was pretty much writing about, and its considered good when people can relate to it Link to comment
Tinkerbell Posted July 7, 2004 Share Posted July 7, 2004 Bravo! =D> It's great that people are able to express themselves through writing. Link to comment
i_hate_the_world47 Posted July 7, 2004 Share Posted July 7, 2004 The poem was awesome.It was also very well written.Plus i could relate to it.Keep writing you have a talent. Meagan Link to comment
myplague234 Posted July 7, 2004 Author Share Posted July 7, 2004 thanks...ive pretty much just started and wanted input..ill post sum more when i write them Link to comment
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