tainted_soul Posted April 12, 2004 Share Posted April 12, 2004 freezing in the buckshot lying in the backyard grass moves like dead mannequins and it's dirty and wet and cold looking through the freezing glass door she's bleeding through the carpet lying on the floor something has all of you/ i'm lost in here standing in the freezing in the grass and the mud is cold like ice blood drips from the buckshot i'm dying out here since when couldn't i walk something has Link to comment
just_smile Posted April 12, 2004 Share Posted April 12, 2004 hey wow i really liked your poem, it was something different from the usual types of poetry your see. i thought it was excellent. keep writing. ~LJ =; Link to comment
avman Posted April 12, 2004 Share Posted April 12, 2004 VERY powerful and interesting imagery. Link to comment
EmptySoul Posted April 12, 2004 Share Posted April 12, 2004 wow. as someone who writes poetry, i love to see something different, and that definitly was. just great. EmptySoul Link to comment
tainted_soul Posted April 12, 2004 Author Share Posted April 12, 2004 thanks for the good comments Link to comment
emotionally_twisted Posted April 20, 2004 Share Posted April 20, 2004 strangely enough i liked this poem. I am really getting into poetry myslef and i though this was really good.Its somethign you don't hear often and it needs to be from the heart which you totally accomplished. To sum it up, it was very good, thanks for letting us hear it. Link to comment
DaManiac Posted April 21, 2004 Share Posted April 21, 2004 ... scary... simple... but... superb! Link to comment
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