breath.o.fresh.air Posted December 3, 2007 Share Posted December 3, 2007 This is the first time I've posted poetry on here....I'd like some honest feedback, been writing for years, but haven't really had anybody comment. Thanks! Taught Read and write Bad to fight What’s right, Wrong, I belong. But where? This spot? Take a look. You’ll see I’m not me. Who am I? Supposedly smart, Where to start? Dropping facades, Afraid. What to expect? How to accept Myself? Link to comment
Stu147 Posted December 3, 2007 Share Posted December 3, 2007 Well I'm not an expert but I like it. It has a natural flow, a nice rhythm, and seems to mean more each time you read it. I'm thinking very good work. Link to comment
breath.o.fresh.air Posted December 4, 2007 Author Share Posted December 4, 2007 Thanks stu!!! Link to comment
Caesium Posted December 6, 2007 Share Posted December 6, 2007 I really like it. It has a nice flow to it. Reminds me of how i usually write lyrics. The words and story behind what your trying to say is not obvious (atleast not to me), Which i really find attractive in poems, So i really liked it Link to comment
breath.o.fresh.air Posted December 8, 2007 Author Share Posted December 8, 2007 Thanks!! Link to comment
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