EmptySoul Posted April 2, 2007 Share Posted April 2, 2007 The pain spirals slowly upward Toward the ceiling As the day fades to grey Pictures on the wall portray The shallow friendships and rock star crushes While your cd plays in the next room Your clothes are folded, lifeless in the chair And the smell of you clings to my sheets The weight of the day without you Unbearable to the point of breaking The smell of drugs And alcohol Cigarettes and The stench of addiction I'm better than this When I'm with you But you're not here And their hands are wandering Despite everything I've said They don't care These words mean nothing On and on until it's finally through I'm a dirty reflection in a mirror Tear stained face Naked and broken and bruised I can't stop the sobs My hands are shaking... *I don't know how to finish this poem. I can't think of an ending. I wanted it to end on a hopeful note, but then the seconds half of the poem came in my head and the hopeful note is shot.* -E. Link to comment
Daddy Bear Posted April 2, 2007 Share Posted April 2, 2007 Another excellent poem, ES. It may not be as life-affirming as you had originally intended, but it poetically and unflinchingly captures a moment that far too many have experienced. Link to comment
AnotherBrokenDoll Posted April 3, 2007 Share Posted April 3, 2007 i like it just the way it is, it shows the pain of addiction. Link to comment
Spugly Fuglet Posted April 3, 2007 Share Posted April 3, 2007 sad soul poem, very tuching Link to comment
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