neva_black_n_white Posted March 1, 2006 Share Posted March 1, 2006 A tear is shed But lapped up by the sun Glistens slightly - The rainbow that had shone These emotions may be sour But they’ve still not been won An ocean could have been created But this wall stood strong You backed me up Like the brick on all foundations You held me strong Proud of my creation I realised then Where these tears had shed Down accross my cheek And upon your shoulder it met This sun beamed - accross the race All the people What they thought But through it all I saw your face ................................................................................ p.s to shysoul.. sorry for toddling a far and taking ages to come back! had a lot of things going on, anyway... see you around, hope your fabulous!!!! kell x Link to comment
neva_black_n_white Posted March 1, 2006 Author Share Posted March 1, 2006 A world of corruption Fits in the palm of my hand The fire the mayhem And all that's bland You see the guns You can watch them flair You can see the grenades – Even feel them there The man right next to you Has his life took away It's a stupid thing this world - His wife gave birth today Think of the chaos The hidden corruption caused You may not have killed his family But you've taken who they live for The war continues though No mercy for the innocent The men pull out their ammo And just load up again You don't see a tear shed Then again who for? Do you know who your killing? Or what your fighting for? Link to comment
ShySoul Posted March 2, 2006 Share Posted March 2, 2006 No problemo kiddo. Post when you can, take care of everything else you have to do. If you are keeping busy, I'm going to assume that you are doing well. If not, you know where to find me. Two great poems, with a lot of meaning behind them. Second one really got to me. What are we fighting for anyways? And is it really worth killing or dying for? What about the people affected who aren't on the battlefield? Makes you question everything. And the first, nice that the face isn't clear who it belongs too. I can see it being taken in different ways, but as someone who has given hope and support to get you through the rough times. Link to comment
neva_black_n_white Posted March 9, 2006 Author Share Posted March 9, 2006 Thanks mr, hope you dont think im becoming a fair weather friend. smiles* just yeah, a lot going on you know? i think it comes to the point where i havent the time and the poems are posted because its what ive vented in 3 minutes flat and its simple. i know that sounds awful, the convenience. Its not about not being bothered about others just not having time to almost be bothered by myself. in a fire the first person you save if your an employee is yourself. try to help others and dont leave those behind but if you cant see anyone you can run right? thats what im doing now. trying to save myself. pretty selfish i know. its a metaphor. i dont really need seriously saving, i just have a few things you know? thanks for being there, thats really nice,most people couldnt or wouldnt offer that life line, your deffinitley something else. thanks hun, hope your okay still! Kell x Link to comment
From_Now_On Posted March 13, 2006 Share Posted March 13, 2006 ur endings were both so good u really know how to finish with something spectacular. good job. =] Link to comment
AnotherBrokenDoll Posted March 15, 2006 Share Posted March 15, 2006 They are really good! Thanx for posting them! I just hope one day people will realise how many lives could have been saved without people going away and killing people! Great poem! Link to comment
neva_black_n_white Posted March 15, 2006 Author Share Posted March 15, 2006 Thanks guys, thats really cool. didnt realise that post was still getting responce, but it was muchly appreciated!! *proper smiles* I shall have to make another contribution to the poem forum some time soon kell Link to comment
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