Outcast-Angel Posted January 7, 2006 Share Posted January 7, 2006 Mists by outcast-angel faces loom in front, to the sides sneering, leering, pitying and loving they walk right through me, cold chills can you tell me which of us is real? i'm the one who feels your pain, kept your secrets beyond betrayal whilst you wrapped yourself, safe, secure in a blanket of our old ties, severed from me can you tell me which of us is real? my mind is burning, freezing in still-pictures killing me from the inside, warping my thoughts your thoughts continue to flower, abomination your eyes still revel in daylight as well as night are you trapt by the looming faces? penned in on all sides, alone gaze through the mists of insanity can you tell which of us is real? Link to comment
ShySoul Posted January 7, 2006 Share Posted January 7, 2006 Love it. If you ask me, you are more real. Allowing yourself to feel everything while he covers it up. Keep it up, you are incredibly talented. Link to comment
Outcast-Angel Posted January 7, 2006 Author Share Posted January 7, 2006 Love it. If you ask me, you are more real. Allowing yourself to feel everything while he covers it up. Keep it up, you are incredibly talented. thanks.. this one wasn't about a guy though.. Link to comment
ShySoul Posted January 7, 2006 Share Posted January 7, 2006 Oops. You are very abstract at times, so its not always clear the exact situation. Which is good, lets people relate it to themselves more. But whatever the circumstances surrounding the poem was, it was good. Link to comment
Outcast-Angel Posted January 8, 2006 Author Share Posted January 8, 2006 Oops. You are very abstract at times, so its not always clear the exact situation. Which is good, lets people relate it to themselves more. But whatever the circumstances surrounding the poem was, it was good. i think i like my writting better when it *is* abstract, because i can read it in different situations, and it still applies, without reminding me overpoweringly of the circumstances which led me to write it.. plus, i was always worried that someone would find them, and find out some stuff i don't tell anyone if i was blatently clear as to the subject matter.^_^;; Link to comment
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