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[Lost2626]

im not kidding

or joking in a slight of way

i wish the light would fade

and end this day

life aint never been a mystery

but more of a fact

that i would never make it

past the time which lapsed

it eats at my heart

while im still

and it grinds on my teeth well i move

its like a disease that is a pain and rips you apart

and in the end

no one will have any disregard

but for the fact that i am me

and life took everything that i could see

[CrystalDawn]

Wow that's really good

[Lost2626]

thanks

i really appreciate it