kuroshiro Posted December 11, 2004 Share Posted December 11, 2004 Ha, actually my poem is titled Rhythm of the Damned. However, this is my first time writing here at all and since it's late and I'm working over a brief lapse of sanity, a simple poem seemed the safest route. Suspended animation demented nation dream obliteration hope cremation Feel the iron drills gouge your skin as your life oozes out of your broken body laying on the floor, a remnant of the past of the last caged inside a cast then the blast- free at last!!!!- Suspended animation Pain Sensation Death Orientation Final Location See the struggles ending all dreams start bending bleeding breaking shattered pieces all around now you can't step on the ground to see the mound of tired struggles with no sound bleed andbleed andbleed... Suspended Animation dream starvation failed operation eternal damnation ... Broken Creation. Shaking inside....sorry, my room's really cold right now and reading this poem obviously isn't helping. Still my adopted policy is to keep whatever I write. No backspacing, no deleting. (supposed to help with my chronic writer's block/social block) Link to comment
Desired1 Posted December 11, 2004 Share Posted December 11, 2004 I liked it. It's Cool. A little depressing but cool. 8) Link to comment
kuroshiro Posted December 12, 2004 Author Share Posted December 12, 2004 Thanks! I had written it while I was depressed once so...yeah, that explains the tone behind it. Glad you liked it! Link to comment
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