Ambie Posted May 21, 2003 Share Posted May 21, 2003 Hey ppls. i need help. i wrote this poem & some of my friends thought i should inter it into some contest. i dont know. i guess im scared of being rejected... again... everytime i enter a piece of my writing into a competition i get told that it is too depressing. here it is. Untitled Understanding that truth is the only real lie they embrace the silence, the solitude, that they can only find inside of themselves. they build soundproof barriers to block the unearthly screams emerging from the souls of the lost and confused, wandering in a daze as they slowly devour themselves from the inside out. restless zombies, pacing through the unending darkness, forever lost in their own minds, hanging on to a single belief, The belief of salvation. peaz help me... what 2 do what 2 do... Ambie Link to comment
tommysgirl Posted May 21, 2003 Share Posted May 21, 2003 Hey! well i wouldn't say i hate ur poem, but it could use some cheery words. don't get me wrong, i like it and all, but it makes me feel.....unwanted. think about what you want it to make someone feel, then write about what you know! trust me! Forever yours, ~Tommy's girl~ Link to comment
EndlessPain Posted May 22, 2003 Share Posted May 22, 2003 Wow...That's pretty damn good...I write poetry myself...Even working on some novels...If you have more post em =) Link to comment
jaiva Posted July 29, 2004 Share Posted July 29, 2004 Nice poem. Continue writing. Jaiva Link to comment
i_hate_the_world47 Posted July 30, 2004 Share Posted July 30, 2004 Nice poem.Just because it is depressing doesnt mean its not good. Link to comment
Stinkweed Posted August 1, 2004 Share Posted August 1, 2004 That's a very nice poem. If the judges in that competition you mentioned before, have really an idea of what is art, then they shouldn't care that it's kinda sad and depressing. Good job. Link to comment
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