Delaurence23 Posted November 4, 2004 Share Posted November 4, 2004 I am a man of wisdom But yet a man that lives in pain I have seen the wonders of the world And the message it spreads That I cannot believe Anything is better than me dead You hide your emotions And bury them deep inside Until you know exactly where they hide I am searching for an answer But end up with nothing As my time draws near The devils hand is squeezing the life out of me As his dark angel kisses her poison lips upon my Crimson goodbyes. In despair I write this note I wish that no one remembers the mistakes I have made And the times I have caused For instead forget me Forget that I even was sawn on earth at all I am a mere figment of this rotting core And tonight, tonight in my death I am walking out the door Link to comment
gefallener_engel Posted November 4, 2004 Share Posted November 4, 2004 this is very powerful and really spoke to me in an all knowing way and yet made me think. sorry if that makes no sense, but its how i felt. i really like. keep it up Link to comment
ForAnother Posted November 5, 2004 Share Posted November 5, 2004 I liked the end. I wrote in another post about the "crimson." I have seen it so many times, and honestly I don't like those wordy stuff anymore. Gimme more of what your thinking. I love streams of thought. You have some rhythm, get some more beat going. (keep in mind I am only another opinion. Don't follow what I say, just take it into consideration I suppose.) ForAnother Link to comment
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