gefallener_engel

wow.. thats nice... i am very interested as well if you dont mind, sounds like you have a lot of talent

this is very powerful and really spoke to me in an all knowing way and yet made me think. sorry if that makes no sense, but its how i felt. i really like. keep it up

can i please get some neg/pos feedback on this one? anything would be great. thank you

You pull them off One at a time To see me suffer Just for you own enjoyment You watch me stumble You laugh as I continuously fall One wing off at a time I can no longer fly It's all your fault It's all my fault It's interesting to see you smile Simple enjoyment by slight pleasures You pretend that you care Your smile shows your lie You could care less I'm just a toy As you watch me squirm You watch me struggle To get to tomorrow So aimlessly and blindly I crawl You have taken my legs My feet, my wings I call for help But no one is there To hear Me scream

I look into your eyes As gentle as the moon glares At the small stars surrounding him I reach out to hold you When I see your tears As bloody as the sunset itself I hurt to see you hurt Just as the moon would cry Watching its stars bleed Right out of the nighttime sky My arms wrapped around Your gentle shoulders Pulling you closer to my heart I can feel you breathe In and out, slowly you shudder Crimson tears stain my shirt But I pull you closer You're so used to being pushed away But the only thing I push away Are the bloody tears out of your eyes I kiss your forehead As your confused eyes look up Right into mine Yes, babe, someone cares I wasn't to hear it all Spill, I'll hold you No longer will you fall No longer will the world spin and make you dizzy While you're in my arms I care to see you smile I hurt when you cry When you hurt When you hurt yourself Come closer to me, baby I want to make all the pain go Away

im not much of a poet but i write all the time... i suck... so heres a poem anyway... dont fall out of your chairs OR wet yourselves from laughing too hard... actually if it makes you happy, then go right on ahead and do that... Reach up high Catch the stars as they fall out of the sky The world is ending And my wounds aren't mending The innocent child pulled the alarm There is no real end to self-harm Look up anyway The pain will end someday Throw away your sharp toys Silver metal makes a distinct noise As it hits the bottom The look of my razors seduction is no longer modern But I can't seem to resist As I drag it accross my wrist I want to take control of my life I have control with my knife The stars fall endlessly against my wrists Like a soft, crimson angel's kiss Fallen angels cry black tears They made a mistake to fulfill all fears Like me, totally misguided They hate life and try to fight it Watch the flowers frown as I walk by I make everything worse -- don't catch my eye I tried to catch the tears that fell But you got worse, I can tell I'm sorry for the pain I've caused But you never even paused When you saw my body cut wide open On the ground my soul is broken Stars still fall all around As my lifeless body lies on the ground Close my eyes, say goodbye I've finally curled up into a ball… and died. engel

great job. if i had one talent it would be the abiltiy to write. ill give you all an ego boost and post some of my stuff! have a good day pm me anytime engel

nikki... good job getting her to post it. i really like it... it hits so close to home. if u ever wanna talk pm me. very good job, you've got excellent talent here! engel

nice. short, simple to the point and deep. i really like it. when you're at the bottom you'd better start climbing up... i hate it (especially when you're out of shape like me) but its the only way to go, well unless you wanna run in circles at the bottom until you throw up on yourself... yeah thats what i thought! im a pretty sarcastic person but ill listen. pm me if u wanna talk anytime. engel

nice!! keep it up

nice poem! i like it -ich bin schon gefallen.