lostlove Posted September 30, 2004 Share Posted September 30, 2004 a poem i wrote...please reply....if you wanna hear another one, just say the word..... Kill Me Now Kill me now and kill me softly, Reap death upon my small cold body, My soul's already dead, I'm already dead, Tears will come and tears will go, Now forever she will know, She did wrong, And she was harsh, I was the target She had the darts, She didn't have to throw them, but, She threw them all the same, Now my heart is living, Vengeance pumping through my veins, I loved him as I loved my life, Now she's gone and done it twice, She'll wake in darkness, In the night, I'll scream my agony, My sadness, my strife, I cannot control myself, I scream with knives, Knives are everywhere, Brutal, yes, I don't care, Kill me now and kill me softly, Grow roses on my grave, You may think you've done me harm, But I've really just been saved. Link to comment
Protex Posted September 30, 2004 Share Posted September 30, 2004 I loved him as I loved my life, Now she's gone and done it twice, . That confuses me a bit. Other than that, great poem. Link to comment
lostlove Posted September 30, 2004 Author Share Posted September 30, 2004 Yeah...this was kinda weird for me, cause i usually do free verse Link to comment
Protex Posted September 30, 2004 Share Posted September 30, 2004 It's only a typo, don't worry about it. It was really well done, and I look forward to reading more. Link to comment
JynX Posted September 30, 2004 Share Posted September 30, 2004 Great poem...it shows alot of emotions...some of it is rather confusing. But great job! I enjoyed reading it. JyNx Link to comment
under_the_pressure Posted October 1, 2004 Share Posted October 1, 2004 Hey, great poem. If you need to talk I'm here. Life does get better, I promise. hugs, under* Link to comment
behind_these_eyes Posted October 1, 2004 Share Posted October 1, 2004 Hey, I didn't think it was confusing; I think you have a real gift, seriously. That's one of the best ones I've read in a while. I really liked the target and dart analogy. Keep writing, it was great! Link to comment
ForAnother Posted October 1, 2004 Share Posted October 1, 2004 Yeah you kiddin me? That wasn't confusing one bit. I loved it. It was fantastic, and coming from a 14 year old... damnit... if only I had that at that age. I really do think you got something good in your writing. I love it. ForAnother Link to comment
i_hate_the_world47 Posted October 1, 2004 Share Posted October 1, 2004 Nice poem.I could reltae very well,i think that gave made me like it more.Anyway,hope to hear more poetry from you soon. ~Meagan~ Link to comment
EmptySoul Posted October 2, 2004 Share Posted October 2, 2004 I really like this poem. This was my favorite part: Kill me now and kill me softly, Grow roses on my grave, You may think you've done me harm, But I've really just been saved. *smiles* Thanks for sharing. Empty Link to comment
Delaurence23 Posted October 3, 2004 Share Posted October 3, 2004 definatly liked it describes all my feelings in poem very good outletting keep truckin Link to comment
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