I wrote a poem: Simple

[ChicoShadow]

Simple

 

Everything is simple in this dream

No bright lights

Nothing to tell me all the answers

I just sit and wonder

 

All that I need is provided by my own hard work

No rushing

No worries

I notice the beauty of the world for the first time

 

I am me

With no standards or norms with which to be compared

I count my moles

I pinch my belly

I absorb the love of those around me and smile

 

 

 

Please tell me what you think. Thanks!

[Samedy]

I like it, it has a very elligent feel to it.

 

*Everyone's a critic* - I did feel the word "norm" was out of place. The word, to me, feels too sterile, compared to the rest of your poem.

[marconi68]

I like that. Sounds like a great place to be. Or to just 'be'

 

Perhaps drop the 'norm', or replace with 'customs'

[Juliette ne pas]

Beautiful, peaceful.

I read this a few times, and imagined myself content, sitting by a brook, under the cool shade of an old tree, who was rooted nearby.

I can close my eyes and hear the breeze softly rustling the the leaves, which like a lullaby lull me into a peaceful sleep, as I lie nestled and protected by the branches of this old tree.

Thank you....You never know how your words can help to encourage the imaginations of others and can a small glimmer of hope or a microsecond of peace