mymelancholysoul Posted August 26, 2004 Share Posted August 26, 2004 She changes Like the summer sun Becomes a bleak winter haze. And her smile Does fall and fade Before the day is through. Standing at the fork With decisions and opportunities Her eyes do falter And hope to find rest. A head full of silence Which echoes through and through Giving her no peace. Lulled to sleep by tears, Woken by regret and fear. Just another sunrise Over fields of sunflower And meadows of despair. Lost like a child In her own desolate mind Where she shall find no comfort. Their arms bring nothing Not even protection, From the harsh wind that blows. Alone on the streets She wanders like the plague Though no one will save her. In the distance But yet so close, Two steel eyes stare down Her empty throat. The path of righteousness Has been crossed And left for better days. Tonight is the road of luck. A swift tug As she blinks and waits. But nothing comes from this. Hysterical and angered, She falls backward into the abyss Where no one is listening. Link to comment
Stinkweed Posted August 26, 2004 Share Posted August 26, 2004 great poem. It's full of deep emotions... Great job =D> Link to comment
daredevil Posted August 26, 2004 Share Posted August 26, 2004 Really good job.. I admire it.... would u like to see my poem+ regrets We had the best relationship, that I ever could ever dream of but suddenly my big thoughts about the future and us got ripped off My feelings for you began to disappear and love was suddenly no more in the air These problems, these pains Why did they make the love run out of my vains?` How could i let go of the girl of my dreams When nothing is as it seems... This torture and this pain I will never experience again... Taken all this and leaving behind... A girl which never will get out of my mind I regret and will never forget How much this love got shred But still having you near Makes this unhappiness disappear... So please let me try... I know this certainly not will be the second goodbye... What do u think ? Link to comment
mymelancholysoul Posted August 26, 2004 Author Share Posted August 26, 2004 I enjoy the piece very much =) The emotion sticks as does the flow. Many times, poems that are about love deal with the kinder times, so its always nice to see a little heartache. Link to comment
i_hate_the_world47 Posted August 26, 2004 Share Posted August 26, 2004 mymelancholysoul,that was one of the best poems i think i have ever read.I loved it.It flowed great and was written very well.Bravo. daredevil,yo had a great poem to.Hope to see you post more.O and welcome to enotalone. ~meagan~ Link to comment
daredevil Posted August 27, 2004 Share Posted August 27, 2004 Thx ... I will stay.. this place really got me hooked.. want to help others.. and of course.. to get help with my problem(s) Link to comment
strawberry_gashes17 Posted August 27, 2004 Share Posted August 27, 2004 dear, that was a great poem... it says so much and yet it says nothing at the same time. u kno that i enjoy all of your poems, and once again you've said it all. dont ever stop writing. and hey u should put "mommy" on here. im sure that many people would enjoy that one. Link to comment
Stinkweed Posted August 27, 2004 Share Posted August 27, 2004 I like your poem too, daredevil. It's really good. Keep up the good work. Link to comment
mymelancholysoul Posted August 27, 2004 Author Share Posted August 27, 2004 Thanks a million Katie =) "Mommy"? Yeah...maybe I will =) Good idea. Link to comment
behind_these_eyes Posted August 27, 2004 Share Posted August 27, 2004 Wow. that was just awesome. Great job. Link to comment
under_the_pressure Posted August 27, 2004 Share Posted August 27, 2004 i enjoyed both poems. good job, hope to see more. under* Link to comment
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