DeadbySunset Posted December 14, 2010 Share Posted December 14, 2010 Every moment is a constant struggle Every moment is a constant huddle Thinking if I get over it Somehow I can just make it Then something gets in my way And I spend all day Trying to make it go away See I smile, but it hides A pain that I keep buried inside It's under lock and key and can't be released Filed away in my memories I can remember when I first thought about suicide Age 10, wishing I could die Didn't want to slit my wrist Didn't know you could die like this I saw on tv that a doctor killed the elderly Assisted suicide, somewhat of a felony Its illegal thats what the law says Thought if I knew the guy everything would be okay 15 years later and still dreading everyday This ain't no suicide note so don't be stressing Just writing about the pain that's been festering There are times when I can't get out of bed There's a pain throbbing in my head I look over at the girl next to me Numbing all my misery She looks at me with those beautiful eyes Just another reason to live this lie Maybe one day I grow up and be big Fans coming asking for my sig Till that day I won't be content Just another negro late on his rent Link to comment
Wager Posted December 14, 2010 Share Posted December 14, 2010 Thank you for sharing this. I found it profound and moving. I think it clever, too, the word play, but given the subject matter, it seems glib to say it that way, so please forgive the clumsy compliment. Link to comment
DeadbySunset Posted December 14, 2010 Author Share Posted December 14, 2010 Thank you for your kind compliment. I didn't think it was clumsy at all. Link to comment
Wager Posted December 15, 2010 Share Posted December 15, 2010 You're really quite very welcome. My best, Wager Link to comment
honesttoblog Posted December 18, 2010 Share Posted December 18, 2010 This is a very good, yet moving, piece of poetry. It is very relatable, not only to me, but to a lot of people I'm sure, especially the first stanza where you have pretty much summed up the whole range of someones feelings towards life when they want to/are contemplating to commit suicide. Thanks for writing it, -K Link to comment
illusionglimps Posted April 9, 2011 Share Posted April 9, 2011 Really really great word play, I absolutely loved it. Link to comment
Michele32 Posted April 10, 2011 Share Posted April 10, 2011 i really like this, thank you for sharing! Link to comment
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